Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the graph show and give information ABOUT THE number of jobs in fou sectors of the economy int different years in 1960 to 2020
the graph show different fou sector of economy of jobs but in different year
he started to 1960 to 2020 the graph show every sector economy in every different year jobs are increasing and decreasing
first manufacturing start in 1960 jobs oaverge 15 millions and in 1980 jobs are increasing to20 millions jobs in 2000 jobs are decreasing to 16 millions jobs in last manufacturing 2020 jobs are more decreasing to14 millions jobs nom i am taking to Retail started in1960 jobs 6 millions and increasing in 1980 to increase 10 millions jobs and in 2000 jobs are more increasing to 15 millions jobs and last 2020 jobs are increase to 15.5 millions jobs
Agriculture jobs are stated in 1960 6 millions jobs but in 1980 jobs are de
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response makes a basic attempt to describe the data from the graph, mentioning several sectors such as manufacturing, retail, and agriculture across various years. However, the text is incomplete, cutting off abruptly in the middle of a sentence about agriculture. Furthermore, the overview is entirely absent, and many specific figures contain inaccuracies or lack precision (e.g., stating manufacturing reached 14 millions in 2020 when the graph shows around 13 millions). Because the task is cut short and lacks an overview or well-developed comparisons, it falls short of addressing all requirements of Task 1 adequately.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The organizational structure of the response is extremely weak. There is no paragraphing whatsoever, with the entire text presented as a single, rambling run-on block. Cohesive devices are largely absent or inappropriately used, such as conversational interjections ('nom i am taking to Retail'). The logical progression of information breaks down quickly, and the text ends prematurely before concluding. As a result, the overall progression is difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on words directly lifted from the prompt and graph labels, such as 'jobs', 'economy', and 'sectors'. There are frequent errors in word choice and phrasing, such as 'jobs oaverge 15 millions' and 'more decreasing'. The range of vocabulary is severely limited and insufficient to demonstrate flexibility or precision, leading to a strain on the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mostly of simple sentences strung together without punctuation. There are severe punctuation and capitalization issues throughout, such as missing capital letters at the beginning of sentences and a complete lack of periods. Grammatical errors are frequent, including tense confusion ('he started to 1960') and faulty subject-verb agreement or preposition use. These errors frequently impede communication and distort meaning.
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