Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-27
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph shows the detail about the figures of employments in four different fields of economy in the America during 1960 and 2020.
Overall,the manufacturing had the highest numbers during this period followed by the retail and agricculyure sector.Healthcare showed the donward trend with lowest figures.
After analysing the line graph ,the people who were job in manufacturing sector had touch the highest figures in 1980 with 20 millions and then starting to decreased gardually and recahed at 13 milions in 2020.In 1960 the Healthcare center covered 6 millions jobs which was the lowest figure in this line graph among all the other fields.After that this center followed the downward trend and reached 2.5 millions in 2020.
On the other hand , the Agriculture and reatil center represented the upward trend during this period of time.Jobs required for agriculture sector was started from 2 millions in 1960 and then increased sharply and touch the figure of 16 millions.The retail center jumped from 6 millions to almost 16 millions from 1960 to 2020.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover the main features of the line graph, identifying trends across the four sectors. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies in data interpretation. For example, the student states that 'Healthcare showed the donward trend with lowest figures', whereas healthcare actually started at 2 million in 1960 and rose sharply to 16 million in 2020, representing the most dramatic upward trend. Similarly, the descriptions of agriculture and retail are confused; the student claims agriculture increased to 16 million while the chart shows agriculture falling to 2 million and retail rising to 16 million. These misreadings mean the response only partially addresses the requirements of the task. Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is structured into an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs, showing an attempt at paragraphing. However, the overall progression is hampered by contradictory and inaccurate reporting of the data. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'After analysing the line graph ,the people who were job in manufacturing sector', which creates disjointed and unnatural transitions. Referencing between sentences is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which sector or data point is being discussed. Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, with frequent word-choice and spelling errors that detract from the writing. Examples include 'agcculyure' (agriculture), 'donward' (downward), 'gardually' (gradually), and 'recahed' (reached). The student attempts less common phrases like 'highest numbers' and 'upward trend', but imprecise collocation and lexical inaccuracies (e.g., 'Healthcare center', 'people who were job') limit the range to a minimally adequate level. Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writing contains a limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent errors in tense consistency, prepositions, and clause formation. Examples of structural errors include 'the people who were job in manufacturing sector had touch the highest figures', 'was started from 2 millions', and missing articles or incorrect pluralisation. Complex sentences are attempted but are frequently faulty and clumsy, causing some difficulty for the reader. Band 5.0.
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