Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This graph illustrate the four types jobs in economic sectors, Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture and lastly Healthcare. In the US which ranges from 1960 to 2020 and the jobs quantities is in millions.
Overall, the manufacturing sector offers the greater jobs. As it offers 15% jobs in 1960 era and most frequent jobs in the era of 1980 but unfortunately it drops the rate of works after 1980s. Moreover, the figure of Retail and Healthcare was at low level in the beginning of 1960 but it significantly increased from thr era of 1980 to 2020. Now last but not least Agriculture, ithis figure had 5% jobs in 1960 but unfortunately it go on decreasing till 2020.
So by this point of view, we got to know that Manufacturing department is the one who gave away most of the jobs to economic. And Retail and Healthcare are side by side to each other as they meet at a particular point in 2020. And lastly Agriculture offers minimum jobs to economy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response covers all four sectors mentioned in the prompt (Manufacturing, Retail, Agriculture, and Healthcare) and provides a general overview, though it misinterprets the unit of measurement as percentages ("15% jobs") instead of millions. Key features are identified, such as the peak in manufacturing around 1980 and the significant growth in healthcare and retail. However, the data points are occasionally imprecise, and the comparisons lack depth. The overview attempts to summarize the main trends, but the lack of accurate numerical scaling and some vague reporting prevent it from reaching a higher band. It addresses the task adequately, fulfilling the requirements for a Band 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into three paragraphs (introduction, body, and conclusion/summary), which provides a basic structural framework. However, the logical progression is hindered by informal transitions ("So by this point of view", "Now last but not least"). Cohesive devices are sometimes inaccurate or awkward, and referencing is occasionally unclear (e.g., "Manufacturing department is the one who gave away most of the jobs to economic"). Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas lacks cohesive polish. Overall arrangement shows a coherent intent, but the execution contains mechanical and repetitive elements, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive ("jobs", "sector", "figure", "era"). There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as "jobs quantities", "offers the greater jobs", and referring to the economy as "economic" or "economic sectors" incorrectly. The misinterpretation of the data scale as percentages further limits lexical precision. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey the basic subject matter, the frequency of lexical inaccuracies places it firmly in the Band 5.0 range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response features a mix of simple and attempted complex sentence forms, but control is inconsistent. There are frequent grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ("This graph illustrate", "the jobs quantities is"), incorrect prepositions and articles ("in economic sectors", "in 1960 era"), and awkward phrasing ("it go on decreasing"). Punctuation and sentence boundaries are sometimes problematic, leading to run-on or fragmented expressions. These errors cause occasional difficulty for the reader, aligning the grammar with a Band 5.0 level.
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