Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the amount of jobs in different four sectors (manufacturing, retail, agriculture, healthcare) of the economy in the US from 1960 to 2020.
Overall, the least number of jobs was in agriculture and highest jobs was in manufacturing. The retail and healthcare was similar jobs in economy in the US.
At a fluting glance, it is immensely clear that the starting at 3 millions in 1960, number of jobs rose to 15 millions jobs from 1980 to 2020 in the sector of healthcare. In 1960, the amount of jobs 6 millions in agriculture, decreasing 3 millions in 1980 which is stable in 2000 that is 3 millions and declined 2 millions jobs in 2020.
It is crystal clear, 5 millions rate of jobs in retail in 1960, which declined 15 millions jobs in 2000 and stable in 2020. Manufacturing jobs is 15 millions in 1960 and rose up 20 millions in 1980 respectively. Jobs is down fall around 13 millions in 2020 in manufacturing.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to report the main features and trends of the four economic sectors shown in the graph. An overview is attempted, although it contains inaccuracies and non-sequiturs (e.g., stating 'retail and healthcare was similar jobs in economy', which contradicts the data where retail grew steadily to 16 million while healthcare surged from 2 million to 16 million). Furthermore, several data points are misread or confused: the student states that retail 'declined 15 millions jobs in 2000' (when it actually rose to 15 million), and that healthcare rose to '15 millions jobs from 1980 to 2020' (it reached 16 million by 2020). While all four sectors are mentioned, the key data figures are frequently inaccurate, limiting the development and accuracy of the response.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into four paragraphs, reflecting an attempt at an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is weak due to awkward phrasing and mechanical transitions such as 'At a fluting glance' and 'It is crystal clear'. Referencing is frequently unclear or confusing, particularly in sentences like 'the retail and healthcare was similar jobs' and 'declined 15 millions jobs in 2000'. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is flawed, and the overall arrangement fails to guide the reader smoothly through the comparative data.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on standard terms like 'jobs', 'sectors', 'economy', 'rose', and 'declined'. There are noticeable word choice errors and unnatural collocations, such as 'amount of jobs' instead of 'number of jobs', 'least number of jobs was in agriculture and highest jobs was in manufacturing', and the lexical error 'fluting glance' instead of 'fleeting glance'. Spelling is generally acceptable, but the limited range of vocabulary and frequent inaccuracies restrict the score to a Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response features a mix of simple and attempted complex structures, but grammatical accuracy is low. There are frequent errors in subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the retail and healthcare was similar jobs', 'Manufacturing jobs is 15 millions'), missing prepositions or auxiliary verbs (e.g., 'which is stable in 2000', 'Jobs is down fall around 13 millions'), and incorrect prepositional usage ('starting at 3 millions in 1960, number of jobs rose'). These frequent errors and awkward phrasings cause difficulty for the reader and impede clear communication.
See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.