Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates the number of jobs in four sectors Manufacturing,Retail,Agriculture, and Healthcare of the economy in the US between the period 1960 to 2020.
Overall, jobs in manufacturing sector was highe from all other sectors but it was decline after some period,while the number of jobs in retail and agriculture sectors rose gradually and remain same at the end but in healthcare sector the number jobs is decrease throughout the period.
In 1960, there were 15 millions jobs in manufacturing sectors which was played the great positive role in US economy and it was rose steadily at 20 millions in 1980 before the decline in the number of job in 2020. On the other hand, jobs in retail and agriculture sectors rose throughout the period and stop at remained almost same 16 millions jobs in 2020. However, there was a 6 millions jobs in healthcare sector in 1960 and decline throughout the period.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main trends in the four economic sectors between 1960 and 2020, but it contains several significant factual inaccuracies regarding the visual data. For instance, the student states that the healthcare sector 'was a 6 millions jobs in 1960 and decline throughout the period' and that retail and agriculture 'remain same at the end' at 16 million, whereas the graph clearly shows healthcare starting at 2 million and rising significantly to 16 million, while agriculture declined to 2 million. Furthermore, the overview contains contradictory and confusing information. Because of these misreadings of the data and flaws in reporting the main features, the response achieves a Band 5.0 for Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is structured into an introduction, an overview, and a body paragraph. However, the logical progression is hindered by poor referencing and confusing connectors, such as 'while the number of jobs in retail and agriculture sectors rose gradually and remain same at the end but in healthcare sector the number jobs is decrease'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of information lacks clarity. Cohesive devices are used mechanically and sometimes inappropriately, leading to run-on sentences that make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. This level of organization and cohesion corresponds to Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The student uses a limited range of vocabulary relevant to the task, including basic terms like 'jobs', 'sector', 'economy', and 'rise'. However, there are numerous word choice and lexical errors throughout the text, such as 'highe' instead of highest, 'is decrease' instead of decreased, and 'stop at remained almost same'. Vocabulary control is weak, and spelling errors like 'highe' and grammatical confusions in word forms detract from the overall quality. The lexical range is minimally adequate to convey basic ideas, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but frequent grammatical errors impede communication at times. Examples include 'jobs in manufacturing sector was highe from all other sectors but it was decline', 'which was played the great positive role', and 'there were 15 millions jobs'. Tense consistency is poorly managed, shifting awkwardly between past and present forms. Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences lacking appropriate boundaries. These frequent structural and mechanical errors place this response firmly in the Band 5.0 category.
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