Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph compare the information about of job in four sector of the economy in the united state from 1960 to 2020 .
Overall , over the period the healthcare and retail job in million was increase . In contrast Agriculture job was decrease over the period . At the begaining Manufacturing job was take the highest number of jobs .However second decade later it follow went down .
Between 1960 and 1980 , manufacturing jobs was the highest jobs . while from 1980 to 2020 it was fall from 20 million to 13 million . healthcare was lowest number of jobs in million . However the healthcare was increase slightly follow upward trend over the period .
In 1960 ,Retail and Agriculture had the same number [around 6 million ] of jobs . But in 1980 retail rose by 3 million of jobs and Agriculture declined by around 3.5 million of jobs . Retail shot up over the period and Agriculture was dropped over the period .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover all four sectors across the given period, providing a general overview in the second paragraph and detailing specific trends. However, there are notable inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that manufacturing jobs took the highest number of jobs at the beginning and then 'went down' after the second decade, but manufacturing actually rose from 15 million in 1960 to 20 million in 1980 before declining. Additionally, some phrasing regarding trends is vague or awkwardly expressed, such as 'healthcare was lowest number of jobs in million'. While the main features are touched upon, the lack of precision in reading the graph and some underdeveloped comparisons place this response at Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into four paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs detailing specific data. However, the overall progression is hindered by frequent mechanical and faulty cohesive devices, such as starting paragraphs with abrupt transitions like 'In contrast Agriculture job was decrease' and repetitive use of 'over the period'. Paragraphing logic is somewhat flawed, as the overview paragraph contains specific observations that overlap with the detail paragraphs. Referencing is occasionally unclear, which disrupts the flow of information. This level of organisation aligns with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, heavily relying on words like 'jobs', 'sector', 'increase', 'decrease', and 'rose'. There are numerous word formation and collocation errors, such as 'job in million was increase', 'At the begaining', and 'it follow went down'. Less common lexical items are attempted but result in unnatural phrasing or incorrect word forms. Spelling mistakes like 'begaining' also occur. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, reflecting a Band 5.0 performance.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak throughout the text. There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and voice, such as 'The line graph compare', 'manufacturing jobs was the highest', and 'Agriculture was dropped'. Punctuation is also problematic, with spaces frequently misplaced before commas and full stops. Because frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and simple structures dominate, this corresponds to Band 5.0.
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