Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The Chart shows the jobs in four sector of the economy in the US between from 1960 and 2020 including manufacturing, retail, agriculture, and healthcare.
The economy of manufacturing jobs are slightly falling down from 1980 and onwards, like jobs of manufacturing in 1960 is approx 15 million and got rise in 1980 to 20 million, after 1980 having a great fall from 20 million to 13 million. The economy of retail shows a great rise from 1960 and onwards, like in 1960 retail jobs are maximum ar 6 million, after 1960 it takes a lot of increase in jobs like 16 million in 2020.
The Economy of Agriculture in US is always getting down, like in 1960, the rate of jobs are 6 million but in 2020 it gows down to 2 million due to no interest in this field. The economy of healthcare, in 1960 it just 2 million, in forward years, it rises upto 16 million in 2020.
In conclusion, I thinks that healthcare is the best opportunity to get a job in it, because their are a lot of health problems that people are facing, its the best time to get a job in healthcare.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The student addresses all parts of the task by selecting and reporting on the four sectors over the given timeframe. Key trends and figures are accurately identified, such as manufacturing peaking at 20 million in 1980 before declining, and healthcare rising significantly to reach 16 million in 2020. However, the overview is weak, and the concluding paragraph includes subjective personal commentary ('I thinks that healthcare is the best opportunity...') rather than summarising the main trends of the graph as required in Academic Task 1. Despite this inclusion of personal opinion, the core data is covered adequately, earning a band score of 5.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is arranged into paragraphs, including an introduction, body paragraphs for the categories, and a conclusion, which provides a coherent overall arrangement. However, logical progression is sometimes hindered by repetitive phrase structures ('The economy of...') and mechanical use of cohesive devices. Referencing can also be slightly unclear. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion lacks flexibility. This performance aligns well with the band 5 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with domain-specific terms like 'manufacturing', 'retail', 'agriculture', and 'healthcare' properly utilised. However, the student exhibits limited lexical flexibility, repeatedly relying on phrases such as 'the economy of' and basic verbs like 'getting down', 'gows down', and 'rises upto'. There are noticeable word-choice inaccuracies, such as using 'economy' instead of 'sector' or 'employment figures', and spelling errors like 'gows'. This represents a limited yet minimally adequate range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, though complex structures are often faulty or awkward, such as 'like jobs of manufacturing in 1960 is approx 15 million and got rise in 1980'. There are frequent grammatical errors, including tense inconsistencies ('is... got rise... having') and subject-verb agreement issues ('rate of jobs are'). Punctuation is also basic. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they cause frequent difficulty for the reader, placing the response firmly at band 5.0.
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