Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the line graph illustrates the amount of jobs avilable in four sectors(manufacturing,retail,agriculture and healthcare) US economy in the years of 1960 to 2020.

overall, manufacturing sector has most of the jobs whereas agriculture accounting very less comparetively moreover shows growth in decline over the period.

In the year of 1960 to 1980 manufacturing sector shown steady growth over the period, providing highest number of jobs(15 million to almost 20 million) and there by a gradual decline in growth also seen over 2000 to 2020.

reatil sector has a stragaring amount of gradual growth over the time period moreover healthcare also creates most of jobs next to manufacturing whih was starting at around 5.1 million to 15.1 million jobs from 1960 to 2020. unike rest of the sectors agriculture sector was only one that genertares least amount of employment with declining growth

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to cover the main trends in the line graph, noting details for manufacturing, retail, agriculture, and healthcare between 1960 and 2020. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the student states that manufacturing 'has most of the jobs' in the overview and shows a steady growth from 15 to 20 million up to 1980, but then claims retail has a 'stragaring amount of gradual growth', while healthcare eventually matches retail at 16 million in 2020, which is poorly articulated. Furthermore, the response falls short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 141 words, which impacts the task achievement score. Overall, the ideas are partially developed with noticeable misreadings of the visual data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response is structured into an introduction and a body of very dense, run-on sentences without proper paragraph breaks. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or incorrectly, such as 'moreover shows growth', 'there by', and 'unike rest of the sectors'. The logical progression of ideas is hindered by poor punctuation, missing articles, and a lack of clear separation between different data series, making the text difficult to follow. Paragraphing is not used sufficiently or appropriately to group related information.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'manufacturing', 'agriculture', and 'employment', but vocabulary use is severely undermined by persistent spelling and word-choice errors. Examples include 'avilable' (available), 'compreetively' (comparatively), 'reatil' (retail), 'stragaring' (staggering), 'whih' (which), 'unike' (unlike), and 'genertares' (generates). These lexical errors and frequent typos restrict the range and make communication strained in several places.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple or awkwardly concatenated clauses joined by conjunctions. There is a complete lack of proper punctuation in places, resulting in run-on sentences. Frequent grammatical errors include missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and faulty tense usage (e.g., 'manufacturing sector shown steady growth', 'agriculture accounting very less', 'healthcare also creates most of jobs'). The majority of sentences contain structural or grammatical errors that cause difficulty for the reader.

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