Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

this line graph illustrates, the percentages of jobs in four economic sectors in US, alongside the jobs percentages, and between 1960 to 2020.

overall, Manufacturing saw the ahead from other, as started with 15 millions in 1960, while this figure peak off in year 1980 stayed 20 millions jobs. which make it the hightest. however, this figure droped and stayed in 12 millions.

conversely, Retail and Agriculture both motives started at the same percentage as 6 millions in the year 1960. Retail went up throughout the year and stayed 16 millions in year 2020. Moreover, followed by agricultre gradually droped a lot and complete stayed 0.2 millions in yeaar 2020.

In addtion, Healthcare started with 0.3 in 1960 and went up over the time and completed in 2020, around 16 millions.

consequence, Manufacturing saw overall top while healthcare sector grew over the time and other two sectors comparatively everage stages.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to report the main features of the line graph showing job numbers in four US economic sectors between 1960 and 2020. An overall trend is provided at the beginning and end, though it is poorly phrased. Some data points are inaccurately reported or confused (e.g., stating healthcare started at 0.3 millions and agriculture dropped to 0.2 millions, whereas the chart shows agriculture at 3 in 1980 and 2 in 2020). However, the main trajectories of Manufacturing, Retail, and Healthcare are generally identified. The response meets the minimum word count requirement of 150 words. Due to inaccuracies in data reporting and limited development, this performance aligns with Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is organized into brief paragraphs, including an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward transitions, run-on sentences, and repetitive phrasing. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or incorrectly (e.g., 'conversely, Retail and Agriculture both motives started', 'In addtion', 'consequence, Manufacturing saw overall top'). Reference words are often unclear, making the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak. These features place the response firmly in Band 5.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('saw the ahead', 'peak off', 'motives started', 'complete stayed'). There are numerous word choice and word formation errors ('hightest', 'droped', 'agricultre', 'everage stages'). The student attempts to use numerical data and economic terms, but severe limitations in lexical control and frequent spelling errors restrict communication and cause strain for the reader. This performance reflects a Band 4.5, rounded to Band 5 for some adequate basic terminology.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are consistently faulty and ungrammatical (e.g., 'while this figure peak off in year 1980 stayed 20 millions jobs. which make it the hightest'). There are frequent errors in verb tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions throughout the text. Punctuation is also faulty, with comma splices and sentence fragments present. These frequent grammatical errors frequently impede communication, corresponding to a Band 4.

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