Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided line graph illustrates the information about the number of jobs in four sectors of economy in the US from 1960 to 2020.
Overall,the maximum number of jobs in four sectors of the economy was shown for retail and healthcare but the minimum jobs was accounted in agriculture over the given time period.
it can be seen that in 1980, significant number of job were used for manufacturing, which was recorded 20 million jobs in this sector however, the figure was declined 7million in 2020. the retail and healthcare were seen which was nearly 16 million jobs in US.
considering remaining other 2020, noticeable number of job seen for manifacturing which was 14 millions and followed by retail ad healthcare, which was around 16 million jobs in US. The least value 2 millions for agriculture in sector in 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 140 words, which negatively impacts task completion. While the student attempts to provide an overview and select key features, the reporting of data contains notable inaccuracies and omissions. For instance, the overview incorrectly states that retail and healthcare had the maximum number of jobs throughout, whereas manufacturing actually started highest in 1960 and peaked at 20 million in 1980. The body paragraphs suffer from fragmented sentences, unclear referencing, and missing data points, such as incorrectly stating figures like 'declined 7million' instead of dropping from 20 to 13 million. Overall, the task is addressed only partially, leading to a band score of 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response is divided into brief paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak and disjointed. The second body paragraph starts abruptly with lowercase text ('it can be seen...'), and the final paragraph is a confusing mixture of fragments and incomplete thoughts ('considering remaining other 2020...'). Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Paragraphing is attempted but poorly executed, resulting in a low coherence score.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The lexical range is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic vocabulary and direct repetition of terms from the prompt, such as 'number of jobs', 'sectors of economy', and 'US'. There are several word formation and spelling errors, including 'manifacturing' instead of manufacturing, and awkward phrasing such as 'minimum jobs was accounted in agriculture'. While the vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic ideas about the chart, frequent inaccuracies in word choice and collocation prevent achievement of a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. The text contains numerous errors, including missing articles ('the maximum number of jobs in four sectors'), incorrect prepositions ('accounted in agriculture'), and major structural fragments, particularly in the final paragraph ('The least value 2 millions for agriculture in sector in 2020'). Complex sentence structures are attempted but are almost always faulty or ungrammatical. Punctuation is also careless, with missing capitalisation at the start of sentences. Frequent errors cause noticeable difficulty for the reader.
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