Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph provides the information nnumber of job in four differet sector of the economy name as manufactturing Retail Agriculture Healthcare in the USA between 1960 and 2020.
Overall, in the beggin there are two graph shows upward trend Retail and Healthcare jobs in millions throughout the periods in addition, other two graph downward trends depicst Manufacturing and Agriculture entire the frame.
firstly, in 1960 economy of the USA manufacturing stod at 15 millions jobs while in 1980 rose up and reached at 20 millions jobs than suddenly declined arrived in 2020 at the number of jobs just less than 15millions. Furthermore, Healthcare in 1960 number od jobs zero until 1980 than, surged up to 2020 at number of around 15 millions
On the other hand, in 1960 Retail and Agriculture stod at same number respectively 6 milliions jobs.Furthermore, Retail was increased and arrived in 2020 at the point of 16 millions jobs while, Agriculture, gradually decreased entire the decades at the end in 2020 milllions jobs in the USA.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by summarizing the main trends for the four economic sectors shown in the graph. An overview is attempted in the second paragraph, identifying upward and downward trends. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting. For instance, the student states that Healthcare in 1960 had a "number od jobs zero," whereas the visual data shows it at approximately 2 million. Additionally, the description of Agriculture at the end of the text is incomplete and unclear ("at the end in 2020 milllions jobs in the USA"). While the main features are touched upon, the lack of precision and incomplete data points pull this criterion down to a Band 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, including an introductory sentence, an overview, and body paragraphs focusing on different sectors. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by poor cohesive devices, awkward transitions (e.g., "in the beggin", "firstly", "Furthermore"), and repetitive structures. Referencing is often unclear, making it difficult to follow which data points correspond to which sectors at times. Paragraphing is present, but overall cohesion is mechanical and faulty, aligning closely with Band 5.0 descriptors.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as "nnumber", "differet", "manufactturing", "beggin", "depicst", "stod", and "milliions". The student attempts less common vocabulary related to economic sectors, but the inaccurate word choices, frequent typos, and limited range restrict the score to a Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for minimally adequate task coverage.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent errors in tense consistency, prepositions, and sentence construction. Examples include "there are two graph shows upward trend", "manufacturing stod at 15 millions jobs while in 1980 rose up", and missing verbs or fragments such as "Retail was increased and arrived in 2020 at the point of 16 millions jobs while, Agriculture, gradually decreased entire the decades". These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and reflect Band 4.5 to 5.0 characteristics.
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