Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This graph shows the year in y axis and jobs in millions in x axis.There are four sectors of economy in the US between 1960 to 2020 which includes the manufacturing,retail,agriculture and healthcare sectors.The healthcare sector job graph is increasing from 2 to 15 in 60 years and the graph of agriculture job sector is slightly decreasing from 5 to 2 and the graph of retail sector job is slightly increasing from 6 to 16 also the manufacturing job sector is increasing and decreasing between theses years which raise from 15 to 20 in 20 years and decreasing from 20 to 13 in 40 years.in this graph shows that healthcare and retail sectors are rising day by day and the manufacturing sector are increased then decreased between theses years and the agricultural sector are decreasing day by day.if we compare the number of jobs in these four sectors of economy the healthcare and retail are probably good then agriculture and manufacturing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by reporting on the four sectors shown in the graph. However, there are significant factual inaccuracies regarding the axis labels in the opening sentence ('year in y axis and jobs in millions in x axis'), which is the reverse of the actual chart. While some major trends are identified, such as the growth in healthcare and retail, the data points are occasionally imprecise or misread, and the response lacks a clear, cohesive overall overview paragraph. The description is somewhat repetitive and fails to synthesize the main comparisons effectively, earning a band score of 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text suffers from a lack of proper paragraphing, being written as a single, dense block of text. Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive (using 'and the graph of...' and 'between theses years' multiple times). Although there is a rudimentary logical flow moving from an introduction to general descriptions and a concluding comparison, the absence of clear structural breaks and inadequate referencing make the progression difficult to follow at times. This reflects the descriptors for Band 5.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is relatively basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on simple terms like 'increasing', 'decreasing', and 'sectors'. There are noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as 'theses' instead of 'these' and 'raise' instead of 'rose'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with little evidence of less common lexical items attempted with success. This performance aligns with Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response features a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on run-on sentences connected by coordinating conjunctions like 'and'. There are frequent punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after periods and commas, and errors in verb tense consistency. Complex sentences are rarely attempted, and basic errors (e.g., 'the manufacturing sector are increased') cause some difficulty for the reader. This corresponds to a band score of 5.0.

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