Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 4.0)
in the given graph we can see that there are four sectors of the economy in the us between 1990 and 2020
from 1990 to 2020 manufacturing was the highest amoung the most and it get increace to 20 millions in 1980 it get Decrace in 2000 by 16 millons and also get decreace in 2020
know we will see that how mcuh the retail has grown from 1960 to 2020 we can see that it was start from lower that manufacturing it get start from 5 millions and has incaere from 10 millons in 1990 and also incarece 2000 but it get less inscrece in 2020 and agriculture was 5 millions in 1960 and keep decreaceing 1980 to 2020 and helthcare was the lowstes that have racehed to 15 millions gettting equle retalis
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, containing only 134 words, which negatively impacts Task Achievement. Furthermore, there are notable inaccuracies in reporting the data: the student states the graph begins in 1990 instead of 1960, and misreports several key figures and trends (e.g., stating manufacturing reached 20 millions in 1980, which is correct, but confusing dates and figures elsewhere). An overview is attempted at the beginning but is underdeveloped due to factual errors and lack of proper summarisation of main features. Band 4.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text lacks any paragraph division, appearing as a single, run-on block of text. Cohesive devices are either missing or conversational and inappropriate for an Academic task (e.g., 'know we will see that how mcuh'). The logical progression is weak and confused by poor referencing and sentence boundaries, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Band 4.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
Vocabulary is very basic, repetitive, and restricted to simple terms like 'increase', 'decrease', and 'millions'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'amoung', 'increace', 'Decrace', 'incaere', 'insrece', 'helthscores', 'lowstes', 'racehed', and 'equle retalis'. These lexical limitations and frequent spelling errors strain the reader and obscure meaning in several places. Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited. The response consists almost entirely of poorly punctuated run-on sentences joined improperly or lacking proper punctuation and capitalisation. There are frequent and systematic errors in tense usage, subject-verb agreement, and clause structure (e.g., 'it get increace', 'it was start from lower', 'agriculture was 5 millions in 1960 and keep decreaceing'). These errors cause constant difficulty for the reader. Band 4.
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