Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The graph illustrates the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960and 2020.
Overall, the line graph graph show four jobs in the US Manufacturing, Reteal, Agriculture, Healthcare. the heailthcare share the highest proportion in the US jobs and agriculture lowest job in the US.
In 1960, the economy of manufacturing start with 15 millions after that one year the economy level raised is 20millions in 1980. the downfall of this economy is started in 1980. the economy level decrease 20-13 millions in 2020. Moreover, Retail is 6millions in 1960 the economy level dramatically increase in 2020 the economy is 16 millions.
In contrast, the agriculture 6 millions in 1960 after that the economy 3millions in 2000 they are not increase 2millions in 2020. The economy of healthcare is the highesr proportion in other sectors in1960 the finincial is 3millions the level is upward years by years in 2020 the economy picking the highest level is 16 millions.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by reporting information about the four economic sectors in the US between 1960 and 2020. An overview is attempted at the beginning, noting the highest and lowest sectors, though it contains inaccuracies regarding healthcare's position in 1960. Several data points are misreported or confusingly expressed, such as claiming healthcare started at '3 millions' in 1960 when the graph shows approximately 2 million, and stating manufacturing 'start with 15 millions after that one year the economy level raised is 20millions in 1980'. The progression of data lacks clear and accurate selection of key trends, leading to an overall score at Band 5.0 due to partial task fulfillment and flawed data reporting.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow and cohesion are severely disrupted by poor sentence structure and mechanical phrasing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as abrupt transitions ('after that one year', 'In contrast') that fail to guide the reader logically through the data. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas within paragraphs lacks clear thematic organization. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow which sector is being described. This performance aligns with Band 4.5, rounded to 5.0 for attempting basic structural division.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, relying heavily on the word 'economy' incorrectly to describe individual job sectors (e.g., 'the economy of manufacturing'). There are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'Reteal' for retail, 'heailthcare' for healthcare, and 'highesr' for highest. Less common vocabulary is attempted with significant inaccuracy, causing strain for the reader. The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for conveying basic numeric trends, placing it firmly at a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response exhibits a very limited range of structures, with frequent serious grammatical errors. Simple sentences are often poorly constructed, and attempts at complex or compound structures result in severe errors, such as run-on sentences and missing verbs ('the agriculture 6 millions in 1960 after that the economy 3millions in 2000 they are not increase 2millions in 2020'). Punctuation is largely neglected, with missing capitalisation and periods misplaced throughout the text. Errors frequently cause difficulty for the reader and distort meaning, matching the Band 4.5 descriptors.
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