Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Here, the line graph illustrates data regarding the jobs in four sector of the economy in US between 1960 to 2020.

Overall, it is clear that the retail and healthcare experienxed an upward trend, while agriculture saw a significant decline over the period.

Looking at the details, it is evident that the process begin with number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the Us, In manufacturing jobs highly peaked in 1980 in 20 jobs in million, and retail job ration in 2000 to 2020 almost same but in 2020 are very high ratio in 15 millions jobs in Us, so healthcare ratio almost same to in 2020 year in jobs in million in 15 millions. In 1960 manufacturing in jobs ration decrease to compare other sectors like agriculture economy decrease in 1980.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response covers the main trends in the four economic sectors, identifying that retail and healthcare experienced an upward trend while agriculture declined. However, the student fails to meet the minimum word length requirement of 150 words, coming in at 135 words. Furthermore, the report contains confusing data references and inaccurate figures, particularly in the body paragraph where the description of the trends becomes disjointed and difficult to follow. The overview is present but brief, and the lack of sufficient detail and word count limits the score to Band 5.0.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The essay is divided into short paragraphs, but the overall organization and logical progression are weak. While transitional phrases like 'Overall' and 'Looking at the details' are used, the sentences within the body paragraph lack logical cohesion and are heavily confused in their referencing. For instance, phrases like 'the process begin with number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the Us' create a confusing flow. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the second paragraph fails to guide the reader effectively, resulting in a Band 5.0 rating.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The student demonstrates a limited range of vocabulary with noticeable errors and spelling mistakes, such as 'experienxed' instead of experienced. Expressions like 'retail job ration' and 'jobs in million' are awkward and imprecise. While some topic-related vocabulary such as 'economy', 'trend', and 'decline' is attempted, the frequent inaccuracies in word choice and collocation cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher score, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar is weak. There are frequent grammatical errors and awkward structures, such as 'it is evident that the process begin with number of jobs' and 'so healthcare ratio almost same to in 2020 year in jobs in million in 15 millions'. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are poorly managed, leading to run-on sentences that impede communication. These frequent errors across basic and complex structures place the grammar at a Band 5.0 level.

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