Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line chart illustrate the information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US from 1960 to 2020 has been provide in the line graph.

Looking from the overall perspective, it is readily apparent that the highest number of job in Manufacturing, while lowest job in Healthcare sectore in the US.

Turning towards the details, In 1960, the date of the job in Manufacturing was 15 millions, which was increase at 20 millions in 1980. After that it was dramaticially decrease from 2000 to 2020 at 16 and 12 millions respectively. Moreover, it also interconnected with Healthcare and Retail at same time. Furthermore, Retail and Agriculture were same in 1960 at 6 millions jobs in the US. Along with this retail jobs was increase slightly in 1980. which was 10 millions. Although, In 2000 jobs was 15 millions in retail and it was almost remain constant in 2020.

To begin with, Agriculture job sectors were decrease in 1960. Between 1980 and 2020 the economy in agriculture sectors were remain constant in the US, but it interconnected with Healthcare sectors at 4 millions jobs in 1980. In the healthcare job sectors in the US were skyrocketelly increase from 1980 to 2020 at 5 millions to 16 millions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response covers the task only partially, reflecting features of the visual data while struggling with accurate interpretation. The introductory sentence is confused and tangled, stating that the graph illustrates the information and that it has been provided. The overview attempts to identify the highest and lowest sectors, but it contains factual inaccuracies based on the chart, claiming Manufacturing had the highest number of jobs overall when Healthcare reached the same level of 16 million in 2020. The body paragraphs describe some trends, such as the rise in healthcare and the drop in agriculture, but details are frequently imprecise or confused, such as stating that manufacturing was 'interconnected' with other sectors. To move up, the writer needs to present a clearer overview without contradictions and ensure all reported data points directly match the provided chart.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response shows some organization, but there is no clear overall progression and the structure is fragmented. Paragraphing is attempted, with an introduction and body sections, but transitional phrases like 'To begin with' are misused in the middle of the response where they do not logically introduce the paragraph's purpose. Cohesive devices are repetitive and sometimes inaccurate, such as the frequent use of 'it' and 'which' with unclear referencing. For instance, 'which was 10 millions' follows a fragment, and 'moreover, it also interconnected' fails to establish a clear logical link between ideas. To achieve a higher level, the writer must use cohesive devices more accurately and structure paragraphs so that ideas follow a logical sequence from start to finish.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices that occasionally cause difficulty for the reader, such as 'sectore', 'date of the job' instead of data or figures, and 'skyrocketelly' instead of skyrocket or sky-rocketing. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, like 'constant' and 'dramaticially', but these are marred by spelling and word-form errors. To improve this criterion, the student needs to expand their range of vocabulary related to data trends and ensure greater precision in word choice and correct spelling of common descriptive terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writer demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple clauses connected by basic conjunctions. Attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty, leading to frequent grammatical errors that can cause difficulty for the reader. Examples include tense confusion and awkward passive/active mixes such as 'the number of jobs... has been provide in the line graph', subject-verb agreement issues like 'Agriculture job sectors were decrease', and preposition errors like 'at 20 millions'. Punctuation is also problematic, with random capitalization and misplaced full stops within clauses. To progress, the student must work on basic grammatical accuracy, consistent tense control, and forming complete, grammatically correct sentences.

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