Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-02
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the information about the number of jobs in four different sectors of the economy in th united states from 1960 to 2020 is depected by the line graph.
overall, retail and healthcare sector showed upward trend, while manufacturing and agriculture showed downward trend with some fluctuations throughout the given time period.
it is cystal clear from the line graph that firstly 15 million economy were doing job in maufacturing and it increased in next 20 years and still at 20 million jobs while it drastically decreased in next 40 years and still at 13 million jobs. 6 million number of jobs in retail
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 103 words. Furthermore, it only partially addresses the task. While there is a basic attempt to introduce the graph and provide an overview, the body paragraphs break off mid-sentence and fail to cover all four economic sectors adequately. The details provided are limited, and the lack of completion prevents a full reporting of the main features and comparisons.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some basic organisation attempted, such as an introductory sentence and an overall summary statement using transition markers like "overall". However, the response lacks overall progression and breaks down completely at the end due to the text cutting off mid-sentence. Cohesive devices are minimal and mechanical, and paragraphing is undeveloped, resulting in a text that lacks a cohesive and logical flow throughout.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary related to data trends, such as "upward trend" and "downward trend", but makes noticeable spelling and word choice errors, such as "th" instead of "the", "depected" instead of "depicted", and "cystal" instead of "crystal". These lexical inaccuracies and the restricted range reflect a basic command of vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The grammatical structures attempted are very limited, relying primarily on simple sentence forms with frequent errors. There are issues with articles (e.g., "the retail and healthcare sector"), missing prepositions, and awkward phrasing such as "15 million economy were doing job". Punctuation and capitalization are also neglected, with sentences starting in lowercase. These frequent errors across basic structures cause some difficulty for the reader.
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