Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrate the details number of jobs of financial system in the United States from 1960 to 2020 in four departments. Overall, the economy of America, and Canada was changed over year in farming, business, production and medical care departments.
In this line graph, the quantity of jobs in different sectors in United States lie in y-axis and the year from 1960 to 2020 lie in x-axis. The production department was highest jobs offer in 1960 as compared to other sectors that was 15 millions, afterwards in 1980, they increased upto 20 millions and then decreased sharply in 2020 was about 13 millions. The medical care department offered less number of jobs in start as all given departments and then dramatically increased upto 16 millions in 2020.
The business and farming sector offered jobs in 1960 was 6 millions, But in 1980 the business department was increased significantly was about 15 millions and in 2000 nearly 16 millions jobs offered in 2020 and farming sector was decreased in 1980 and then almost stable in 2020 year.
To conclude that the manufacturing showed highest jobs and farming showed lowest jobs offered in millions.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
The response addresses the task partially, attempting to present an overview and select key data from the line graph. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting and interpreting the visual data. For instance, the student refers to the US economy as including Canada, and misinterprets the subject matter as 'financial system' and 'departments' rather than the four economic sectors clearly shown in the chart. While some main features are mentioned—such as manufacturing starting at 15 million in 1960 and peaking at 20 million in 1980—the overall progression is obscured by factual confusion and under-developed descriptions of trends, such as the vague treatment of the retail and agricultural sectors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response shows some organisation with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a brief conclusion, but it lacks a clear overall progression. Paragraphing is attempted, yet the grouping of ideas is somewhat haphazard, combining retail, business, and farming in a single body paragraph without logical transitions. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or inadequately, as seen with repetitive phrasing like 'offered jobs in 1960 was' and abrupt shifts between sentences. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information smoothly across the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task. The student relies on basic, repetitive terms and makes noticeable word choice errors, such as describing economic sectors as 'departments', referring to jobs as 'highest jobs offer', and incorrectly mentioning 'Canada'. There are also frequent word-form and collocation inaccuracies, like 'less number of jobs in start'. While the meaning can generally be inferred, these lexical slips cause some difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The writer demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and basic descriptive patterns. Attempts at complex or longer sentences are frequently faulty, leading to severe structural awkwardness and missing verbs or prepositions, such as in 'The business and farming sector offered jobs in 1960 was 6 millions'. There are frequent errors in verb tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'increased upto', 'in 2020 was about', and 'lie in y-axis'. These persistent errors can cause strain and difficulty for the reader.
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