Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The graph chart gives information reated to the digits of occopation in four parts of the economy in te US between the time peroid. The data by selecting the main featurs and comparisons,with there relevance.

overall, the jobs in that period, common by the relevance, of the information .in 1960 ,the US economy to illustrate of facturing system ,that will be very crucial for jobs, in million.

In 1960, by comparision of the manufacturing system ,are increase maximum number of sectors,15million, to 20million on that time period. In 1980 they wil be dicrease maximum ratio of 15million ,to 17million,on the other side retail price in economy 5 million, to 15million that will be to top level in that time.

The agriculture,and healthcare there are common diffrence from the era .In 2000 to 2020, agriculture in that time period might be increase and dicrease .There are the common difference of time period . healthcare, 3million to 16million , around the period .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response responds to the task only minimally and tangentially. While the writer attempts to introduce the chart, the overview is extremely confused and fails to present a clear picture of the overall trends. The specific details provided are largely inaccurate and fail to properly report the data from the graph; for example, confusing employment numbers and misinterpreting the direction of trends for manufacturing, retail, and agriculture. The attempt to select and report main features is undermined by fragmented, unintelligible sentences that do not successfully summarize the information.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently in this response. The text lacks logical organization and progression, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs is disjointed and chaotic. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in abrupt transitions between sentences, such as the sudden shifts between different economic sectors without clear linking or referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'reated' for related, 'occopation' for occupation, 'featurs' for features, and 'dicrease' for decrease. Word choice and word formation are frequently inappropriate, leading to awkward phrasing like 'digits of occopation' or 'retail price in economy'. These lexical errors and limitations severely strain the reader's ability to understand the intended meaning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent and severe errors that distort meaning. There are fundamental issues with basic grammar, including incorrect verb tenses, missing or incorrect prepositions, and faulty sentence construction. Many sentences are fragmented or incomplete, such as 'The data by selecting the main featurs and comparisons,with there relevance.' Grammatical errors are pervasive throughout the entire text, creating constant difficulty for the reader.

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