Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph displays the number of employment in manufacturing, retail, agriculture and healthcare sectors of economy in the america between 1960 and 2020

Overall, jobs in healthcare and retail sector increased consistently over the period while manufacturing and agriculture sectors show steady decline.

Employment in medical field was the lowest from all other sector around 2 millions in 1960 and grow significantly to just above 15 mililions at the end of the period. Jobs in Retails sector begin with roughtly 6 millions in 1960 and then increase consistently every year with slightly over 15 million in 2020.

Jobs in manufacturing sector was the highest of all 4 sector in 1960 with just above 15 million and increase to nearly 20 million in 1980 and then gradually decrease throughtout the peroid with just below 13 millions by 2020. In 1960 jobs in Agriculture sector was little over 5 millions which then decrease to nearly 2 millions in 1980 and show downward trends toward the end of the year by close to 1 million by 2020

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

The response successfully addresses all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons of the four economic sectors between 1960 and 2020. An overview is provided that correctly highlights the main upward trends in healthcare and retail alongside the downward trends in manufacturing and agriculture. Key data points, such as the initial and final values for employment, are selected and reported accurately, meeting the requirements for a solid performance. Ideas are well-supported with figures from the graph, though a slightly more extended comparison between sectors could elevate the response further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The report presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear logical progression from the introduction to the overview and body paragraphs. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate different sectors and themes. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical, and referencing between sentences could be smoother. While basic cohesive devices are employed, more varied linking phrases would enhance the flow and elevate the organization to the next level.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The response uses an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully attempting less common items related to economic trends, such as 'consistently', 'steady decline', and 'significantly'. However, there are notable word choice and spelling inaccuracies, such as 'number of employment' instead of 'level of employment', 'Retails' instead of 'Retail', 'roughtly', 'mililions', and 'throughtout'. These errors do not impede communication but demonstrate the limitations characteristic of this level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

A mix of simple and complex sentence forms is attempted, with examples of time clauses and comparative structures. There are several grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'Jobs in manufacturing sector was' and missing or incorrect articles, such as 'in the america'. Punctuation is also sparse, particularly with missing full stops at the end of the text and introductory sentences. These errors occur frequently enough to remind the reader of this level, although they rarely completely impede comprehension.

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