Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The line graph illustrates information about number of jobs in four sectors of economy namely, manufacturing, retail, agriculture and heathcare in US between 1960 to 2020.
Overall, while the figure for manufacutring and healthcare decreased signifiacntly.Another key feature is that the retail and agriculture sector increased moderatrely throughout the period.
The total number of manufacturing number reach 15 million to 20million between 1960 to 1980. Followed by, the number of job sectors started falling 20 million to around 18 million in 2000 to 2020. The retail job have around 6 million number of jobs which increased significantly to 16 million in 1980 to 2020.
The agriculture sector was started from 6 million in 1960 however after 1980 the number of job in agriculture sector was been decreased repaidly from 4 million to 2 million between 2980 to 2020 all over the period. The figure for healthcare strated to 3 million in 1960 which was incresing all time to 5 million and at the end it reach to 6 million all over the period
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to present an overview of the four sectors shown in the line graph, but it contains several inaccuracies regarding the data. For instance, the overview incorrectly claims that both manufacturing and healthcare decreased significantly, whereas healthcare actually rose sharply from 2 million to 16 million. Furthermore, the details provided often misstate the numbers, such as claiming the retail and agriculture sectors increased moderately while misreading the actual trajectories on the graph. The response addresses the task only partially, as the information is limited, under-developed, and contains noticeable factual discrepancies against the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has some organization into paragraphs, including an introduction and an overview, but there is no clear overall progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as the dangling sentence fragment 'Another key feature is that the retail and agriculture sector increased moderatrely throughout the period' standing alone without completing the contrast, and the disconnected phrase 'Followed by'. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the mechanical transitions make the progression difficult to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, with several noticeable spelling and word choice errors that cause difficulty for the reader. There are multiple spelling mistakes, such as 'manufacutring', 'signifiacntly', 'moderatrely', 'repaidly', and 'strated'. Furthermore, inappropriate word forms are used, such as 'heathcare' and writing 'manufacturing number reach'. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, but the frequency of lexical errors impedes smooth communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors in verb forms, tenses, and prepositions, such as 'The agriculture sector was started from', 'the number of job in agriculture sector was been decreased', and 'The figure for healthcare strated to 3 million in 1960 which was incresing all time'. These frequent errors frequently strain the reader and cause difficulty in understanding the intended meaning.
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