Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given information illustrates about numver of jobs in four different areas of the economy in United sates between 1960 and 2020.

Manufacturing industery was sarted from 15 in 1960 it was on it's boom in 1980 to 20 but it graduly decrease less than 15 in 2020. On the other side Healthcare area was at around 2 in 1960 but it's get increase to 15 in 2020. There is one noticealble point is that it grows very fast from 1980 to 2000 from 5 to 11 and in 2020 it was at 16.

Agriculture and Retail both sections were at same point in 1960 but there is huge difference in both of them Agriculture sectore was not adoped so it Graduly declined from 6 to 2, but Retail sector is increassed from 6 to 16 in just 60 years, which means there are more number of opportunies in the Retial rather than agricultural.

The chart of US jobs in different sector shows that Agriclture and Manufacturing sectors are not generating jobs but Reial and Healthcare are.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response attempts to address all parts of the task by reporting on the number of jobs across the four sectors between 1960 and 2020. However, the information is only partially covered, and some key features are overlooked or inaccurately presented, reflecting a limited and under-developed approach. For instance, the student notes that Manufacturing started at 15 in 1960, peaked in 1980, and decreased to less than 15 in 2020, but the final data point (13 million) is vague. Similarly, descriptions of Agriculture and Retail lack precision in tracking the complete trajectory over the sixty-year period. The overview provided in the final paragraph is very basic, simply stating that some sectors are generating jobs while others are not, without synthesising the broader comparative trends required for a higher score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The essay displays some organization with a recognizable introduction, body paragraphs, and a concluding sentence, but there is no clear overall progression or logical flow between ideas. Paragraphing is attempted, grouping Manufacturing and Healthcare together and Agriculture and Retail together, but the internal transitions feel disjointed. Cohesive devices are used minimally and somewhat inaccurately, such as the abrupt transition 'On the other side' and run-on structures like 'Agriculture and Retail both sections were at same point in 1960 but there is huge difference...'. Pronoun referencing and signposting are inadequate, making the progression of information mechanical and sometimes difficult to follow from sentence to sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and barely adequate for the task, with a restricted range that often repeats basic terms. There are noticeable lexical errors, including spelling mistakes such as 'numver', 'industery', 'sarted', 'graduly', 'noticealble', 'adoped', 'increassed', 'opportunies', 'Retial', 'Agriclture', and 'Reial'. Word choice is also frequently imprecise, such as using 'area' or 'sections' instead of 'sectors', and 'on it's boom' rather than 'reached a peak'. While the reader can generally discern the intended meaning regarding the job statistics, these frequent spelling and word-choice errors cause difficulty and pull the response down.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response exhibits a limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences alongside a few faulty attempts at complex ones. Frequent errors are present throughout the text, including tense inconsistencies, missing prepositions, and faulty verb forms. Examples include 'Manufacturing industery was sarted from 15', where the passive voice is misused, and 'it's get increase to 15', which shows poor control over verb morphology. Punctuation and article usage are also weak, with several run-on sentences joined improperly by commas rather than conjunctions or full stops, such as '...Agriculture sectore was not adoped so it Graduly declined from 6 to 2, but Retail sector is increassed...'. These frequent errors require the reader to decode the meaning.

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