Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the information avout the number of jobs in four sectores of the economy in the US betweeen 1960 and 2020.

Overall, it can be seen that the most popular jobs was Healthcare in the US eoconomy. While the least popluare jobs was Agriculture. It is noticeable that the Retail rose dramatically from the given periods.

To commence, the highest demand for Healthcare begain with 2 millions of jobs in the US economy and it was slightly rising to 1980 but after it was climb fast until the 2020 However, this jobs was most successfull in all over the periods. On account of, the onther jobs which additionally more marketing in the US economy sectors was the Retail and it was initiate 6 millions of jobs hinking in these country. Moreover, in the year 2000 after it was go up slowly to 2020.

On the other hand, regarding the another two which decline the all year. the Manufacturing jobs was beginning with 15 millions of job and it well growing to since 1980 but after some year it diminished to till 2020. Finally, the Agriculture which was lowest jobs in the US and it was started 6 millions of job and fall to 1980 and it well remain stable till 2000 after it will significantly reduce the Agriculture jobs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response attempts to present an overview of the line graph showing the number of jobs in four US economic sectors between 1960 and 2020. However, the task is only partially addressed because some of the key features and data points are inaccurately reported or misinterpreted. For instance, the student states that Healthcare was the most popular job from the start and that Agriculture started at 6 million (whereas Agriculture started at 6 million, Healthcare actually started at the lowest point of 2 million). Furthermore, the overview is somewhat confused, and the conclusion contains unsupported generalizations. To move to a higher level, you should ensure that all main trends and starting figures are read correctly from the graph and that comparisons are made with greater factual accuracy.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response into paragraphs, and some cohesive devices are employed, such as "Overall", "To commence", and "On the other hand". However, the progression is not always clear, and the overall arrangement feels disjointed. Transitions like "after it was climb fast" and "On account of, the onther jobs" disrupt the logical flow. Additionally, referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to follow which sector the writer is referring to (e.g., "this jobs was most successfull"). To achieve a higher score, you need to use cohesive devices more accurately and ensure a smoother logical progression of ideas from sentence to sentence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, reflecting a basic range. There are noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form that occasionally cause confusion for the reader, such as "avout" instead of 'about', "sectores" instead of 'sectors', "popluare" instead of 'popular', and "begain" instead of 'began'. Phrases like "more marketing" and "hinking in these country" are unnatural and fail to communicate the intended meaning clearly. To improve in lexical resource, you should attempt a wider variety of vocabulary with more precise word choices and pay closer attention to spelling and standard collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response displays a limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, which often impede readability. Examples include "the most popular jobs was Healthcare", "it was slightly rising to 1980", and "the Manufacturing jobs was beginning with 15 millions of job". Punctuation is also weak, with run-on sentences and incorrect capitalisation in the middle of clauses (e.g., "till the 2020 However, this jobs..."). To progress, you need to demonstrate better control over basic grammatical forms, avoid mixing past and present tenses inappropriately, and reduce the frequency of structural errors.

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