Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line Graph illustates change in employmeny number action across four different economic sectors in the US from 1960 ti 2020

overall, thereare are 60 years of shift of economic sector are there, characterized the healthcare sector leading very rapidly also there is slightly less the retail sector increase. however the Manufacturing sector is significantly decreases.

the healthcare sector is aggrassively increase from the 1980 however more than 11 millions jobs vacancies are open for publicly. however the camparing with the retail sector there is also a equally increase with the healthcare sector.

Agriculture sector recorded the lowest figure in 60 years. however the manufacturing sector also decreasing from the 1980 towards the downfall.

overall the US economy will be leading in the health sector and the retail sector as compare to the manufacturing sector also in 2020 the retail sector and healthcare sector becoming the equal like 16 million.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response makes an attempt to summarise the main trends in the four economic sectors between 1960 and 2020, such as noting the rise in healthcare and retail alongside the decline in agriculture and manufacturing. However, the task is addressed only partially. Key data points are occasionally imprecise or poorly connected to the visuals, and the overview is repetitive rather than synthesizing the main features effectively. Some ideas are underdeveloped, and the position is not always clearly communicated due to inaccuracies in reporting specific trends and figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation attempted through paragraphs, but the response lacks a clear overall progression. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as repetitive and misused linking words like 'however' at the start of multiple sentences. Referencing is frequently unclear, and the mechanical repetition of sentence starters disrupts the flow and logical development of ideas, making the overall arrangement difficult to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. There are noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form, such as 'illustates', 'employmeny', 'aggrassively', and 'camparing'. These lexical inaccuracies and occasional non-standard word formations cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted range of vocabulary suitable for describing graphical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response displays a very limited range of sentence structures, with frequent errors in basic grammar, punctuation, and articles. There are problems with subject-verb agreement and structural control, such as in 'thereare are 60 years of shift of economic sector are there' and 'manufacturing sector also decreasing'. These frequent errors create obstacles for the reader and indicate a heavy reliance on simple patterns with faulty attempts at complex forms.

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