Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The Graph illustrates the number of jobs in four different sectors that are Manufacturing , Retail , Agriculture and Healthcare of the economy in the United States in the years of 1960, 1980 ,2000 and in 2020 where jobs are in millions
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 2.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 3.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 2.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 42 words. Because of this extreme brevity, the student has only written an incomplete introductory sentence and completely failed to summarise the main features, report data, or make comparisons. The response addresses the task only minimally and does not provide an overview or body paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5
The text consists of just a single, run-on introductory sentence, making it impossible to evaluate paragraphing, logical progression, or the use of cohesive devices in a full essay structure. While the single sentence attempts to introduce the graph and list the categories, there is no overall organization or logical sequence of ideas present because the writing cuts off before any body information can be presented.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The student demonstrates a basic vocabulary range suitable for introducing a graph, using functional terms such as 'illustrates', 'number of jobs', and 'sectors of the economy'. However, the vocabulary is extremely limited due to the severe shortness of the response. There are minor punctuation errors, such as unnecessary spaces before commas around the list of sectors, but the words attempted are generally spelled correctly and appropriate to the topic.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The writing is restricted to a single complex sentence structure that attempts to incorporate a relative clause ('that are...'). Punctuation is faulty, particularly with the placement of spaces before commas in the list 'Manufacturing , Retail , Agriculture and Healthcare'. Because the text is only 42 words long, it is not possible to assess a wider range of grammatical structures or tense control across a full response.
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