Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The graph display number of jobs in manufacturing, retail, agriculture and healthcare sector in america between year 1960 and 2020
Overall, number of jobs in healthcare and retails increase over the period of year, whereas in manufacturing and agriculture sectors shows decline from year 1960 to 2020
Number of job opportunity in healthcare sector was the lowest in 1960 with around 2 millions as compare to other sector, As passage of year, it increase significantly to above 15 millions by year 2020, followed by retail sector which was roughtly around 5 millions at 1960 and then rose to nearly 15 millions at 2000 and continues to increase slightly above 15 millions at 2020
Number of jobs in manufacturing sector was the highest of all other sector in year 1960 with around 15 millions then grows to approximatey 20 millions in 1980 then continues to decline with around just below 15 millions at the end of year, while jobs in argiculture field continues to decrease from 6 millions at 1960 to around 3 millions by year 2020
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0
The response successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features, trends, and comparisons across the four economic sectors. An overview is provided, noting the upward trends in healthcare and retail alongside the downward trends in manufacturing and agriculture. Key data points are selected and reported accurately, such as the peak for manufacturing in 1980 and the starting points in 1960. While the ideas are adequately extended and supported to meet the requirements of this band, the overview could be slightly more integrated, and some specific trends could be grouped more logically to reach higher levels of task fulfillment.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5
The response demonstrates a clear overall progression and logical organisation throughout. Information about the sectors is grouped into paragraphs, distinguishing between upward and downward trends. Cohesive devices such as 'whereas', 'followed by', and 'while' are used to connect ideas, though referencing is occasionally mechanical or repetitive. Paragraphing is present and helps structure the text, but the first two paragraphs lack full supporting development, functioning more like an extended introduction rather than distinct body paragraphs, which keeps the structural fluidity at this level.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with appropriate topic-specific terms such as 'manufacturing', 'retail', 'agriculture', and 'healthcare'. The student attempts less common vocabulary like 'significantly', 'approximatey', and 'decline', but there are noticeable errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'display' instead of 'displays', 'retails' instead of 'retail', and 'roughtly' instead of 'roughly'. These errors do not impede communication, but they reflect a limited control over less common lexical items, preventing the writing from achieving a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The text displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures with relative clauses and subordinate conjunctions. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly missing articles ('The graph display number of jobs'), incorrect verb forms ('increase' instead of 'increased'), and punctuation issues. Subject-verb agreement is also weak in places, such as 'number of jobs... shows'. These errors occur regularly and require some effort from the reader to decode, which places the response firmly within this grammatical range.
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