Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph illustrates the number of vacancy in manufacturing, retail, agriculture and healthcare sectors of the economy in the united state over a fourty year period. Units are meausred in millions

Overall, It can be clearly seen that manufacturing is the leading sectors in 1960, where as retail sector and healthcare became the highest sector in 2020 while agriculture declined over the period.

In 1960,Manufacturing became highest job available sector with that it reach peak at 20 millions in year 1980. after that it start decresing steadly at 13 millions in 2025. Retail and Agriculture start at the same point 7 millions

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response fails to meet the minimum word length requirement, stopping abruptly at just over a hundred words. The student attempts to address the prompt by selecting some key features, such as the peak of manufacturing in 1980 and the upward trend of retail and healthcare. However, the information is only partially reported, and the data contains inaccuracies, such as stating that manufacturing reaches 13 million in '2025' when the graph ends in 2020, and abruptly ending mid-sentence. The overview is overly simplistic, and the overall treatment of the task remains underdeveloped due to the severe lack of length and incomplete analysis.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to structure the response with an introductory sentence and an overall summary, but the organization lacks clear overall progression. Paragraphing is fragmented, with the third paragraph cutting off mid-thought. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes mechanical, such as 'Overall, It can be clearly seen' and 'In 1960'. Referencing is occasionally confusing, and the lack of a fully developed body makes the logical flow difficult to follow. To improve, the student needs to group data more logically and connect sentences smoothly using a wider variety of cohesive markers.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and basic, reflecting a minimally adequate range for the task. There are several noticeable lexical errors, such as 'fourty' instead of forty, 'meausred' instead of measured, 'decresing' instead of decreasing, and 'steadly' instead of steadily, alongside word choice issues like 'number of vacancy' instead of number of jobs. These errors occasionally cause some difficulty for the reader. To reach a higher band, the student should incorporate a wider range of less common vocabulary with greater precision, improve spelling accuracy, and use more natural collocations when describing statistical data.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The text relies on a limited range of simple and basic complex structures. There are frequent grammatical errors, including capitalization and punctuation issues like 'Overall, It can be clearly seen', missing plural forms or incorrect subject-verb agreement such as 'manufacturing is the leading sectors', and preposition errors. Attempts at complex sentence forms are often faulty or incomplete, as seen in the final unfinished sentence. These frequent errors can cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, the student needs to demonstrate better control over basic sentence construction, punctuation, tense consistency, and subject-verb agreement.

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