Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph illustrate about the data of jobs in four sectors of us economy between 1960 to 2020.

Manufacturing jobs wes at 15 million in 1960. In 1980 it rise to 20 millions.In 2000 it slightly get down to 13 millions.In 1960 retail jobs wew only 6 millions.But rise dramaticaly in 1980 and managed to increse in next 22 years to 16 millions.

Healthcare jobs were 3 millions in 1960.In 1980 it slightly grow to 5 millons.It surged to 11 millions in 2000 and boost to 16 million after 20 years.Agriculture jobs in 1960 was at 6 millions after 20 years it incresed to 3 millions.It remain same next 20 years. And slightly reduce to 2 millions.

Overall, manufacturing was at its peak 20 millions in 1980.however healthcare seems dramaticaly increse after 1960.Agriculture remain almost same.Retail have ups and downs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the task only partially, and additionally, the Length Check confirms that the text falls short of the minimum 150-word requirement, totaling only 140 words. While you attempted to cover all four sectors, some of the data reported contains inaccuracies or contradictions when compared against the visual data. For instance, you state that agriculture increased from six to three millions in twenty years, which is mathematically contradictory. Furthermore, the overview is limited and lacks precision regarding the overall trends across the entire sixty-year period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some basic organization with an introduction, body details, and an overall concluding sentence, but the response lacks clear overall progression. Paragraphing is underutilized and bunched together, particularly in the body section where multiple sectors are crammed into a single block of text. Cohesive devices are minimal and repetitive, and referencing between sentences is sometimes unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logical development of ideas smoothly throughout the report.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary range is limited and minimally adequate for the task. You attempt some less common vocabulary such as 'dramatically' and 'surged', but these are often accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, form, and collocation, such as 'slightly get down', 'increse', and 'boost to 16 million'. Spelling mistakes like 'wew' and 'millons' also occur, which causes some difficulty for the reader and prevents the writing from reaching a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response features a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple sentences with frequent basic errors. There are numerous grammatical inaccuracies, including subject-verb agreement issues like 'Manufacturing jobs wes' and tense confusion, such as stating 'Agriculture jobs in 1960 was... after 20 years it incresed to 3 millions' when the graph actually shows a drop from six to three. Punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after full stops, and awkward prepositions within grammatical patterns are frequent and cause strain for the reader.

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