Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph represents the data of number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in US between 1960 to 2020.

Overall, the graph shows the data of 4 sector that is manufacturing represent by circle, retail represent by triangle, agriculture represent by square and healthcare represent by diamond.

first of all in 1960 manufacturing dominate the job market with 15 million number of jobs. However, retail and agriculture share same number that is 6 million. At last the healthcare have lowest jobs among these 4 wich is 3 million. After 2 decade manufacturing is still dominate number of jobs in 4 sector with 20 million. Whereas retail and healthcare arise with 10 million and 5 million respectively. Moreover agriculture is slightly decrease to 4 million.

In year 2000 agriculture remain same as in 1980 that is 4 million. However, retail and healthcare shows growth which is 15 million and 11 million respectively, whereas manufacturing is still on top but slightly descrase to 16 million. Although in year 2020 manufacturing fall to 13 million and healthcare to 3 million. In addition retail and healthcare came on top with around 16 million each.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You report several key figures and trends, including manufacturing’s peak at 20 million in 1980 and the growth of retail and healthcare by 2000. However, the overview mainly identifies the chart’s symbols rather than summarising its main patterns. There are also important inaccuracies: healthcare starts at about 2 million, not 3, and rises to about 16 million by 2020; it does not fall to 3 million. Agriculture is about 3 million in both 1980 and 2000, then 2 million in 2020, rather than 4 million in the earlier years. To make the response more complete, give a concise overview of the contrasting long-term trends and check each endpoint against the graph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic chronological structure, moving from 1960 through 1980 and 2000 to 2020, and paragraph breaks help separate the introduction, overview and details. However, the overview does not provide a clear progression of the main trends, and the final paragraph is confusing: it says manufacturing is “still on top” in 2000, then concludes that retail and healthcare “came on top” in 2020 without clearly distinguishing their equal values from manufacturing’s lower figure. Linking words such as “However,” “Moreover” and “In addition” are used, but some connections are mechanical or do not clarify the comparison. Grouping the rising sectors together and the declining sectors together would make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “job market,” “growth,” “fall” and “million,” so the reader can generally identify the subject and direction of change. However, the range is limited and several word choices or forms are inaccurate or repetitive, such as “the data of number of jobs,” “arise with” and “manufacturing dominate.” Spelling errors including “wich,” “descrase” and “decrease” (used incorrectly in “slightly decrease”) also reduce precision. Aim for standard reporting collocations such as “the number of jobs,” “rose to,” “declined to” and “accounted for.” More accurate verbs for trends would help you describe the data clearly without repeatedly relying on “shows” and “with.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some complex sentences using contrast and time clauses, for example, “Although in year 2020 manufacturing fall to 13 million,” but errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to interpret. Verb forms and agreement are recurring problems: “manufacturing dominate,” “retail and healthcare shows,” and “manufacturing fall” need appropriate tense and agreement. Articles and sentence construction are also inconsistent, as in “the healthcare have lowest jobs” and “After 2 decade manufacturing is still dominate.” Most sentences follow simple patterns, with limited accurate variety. Practise past-tense reporting and build sentences around clear subjects and verbs; then check articles, plurals and punctuation when editing.

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