Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph iilustrats information about the number of in different fields od the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Overall, as graph discribe the different sectors mainly in manufacturing field had 15 millions jobs which is the highest number.On the other hand healthcare had only 2.5 millionss which is the lowest number in all sectors.

There was mainly four sectors Manufaturing,Retail,Agriculture and Healthcare.The manufacturing had highest numbers of jobs in 1960 and also had gain in1980.The number in 1960 was 15 millions and in 1980 it toch the highest in all sectors which is 20 millions but after some period it start fall and as we saw it keep falling in 2020 it goes under 15 millions.However the healthcare had massive gain in jobs from the beging it has only 2.5 millions of the jobs but it gain over 15 millions.On the other hand retail also has gain in jobs and it's similer to healthcare in 2020.Moreover in Agriculture sector people avoid to work in that field and from beging it has 5.1 millions of jobs but in 2020 it only has 1 million jobs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the four sectors and report several important patterns: manufacturing peaks in 1980 before declining, while retail and healthcare rise and agriculture falls. However, the overview is not fully accurate or clear: manufacturing is highest in 1960, but healthcare is not the lowest at 2.5 million; agriculture is about 6 million then. Some figures are substantially misreported, especially agriculture at 5.1 million initially and 1 million in 2020, compared with approximately 6 and 2 million. The ending comparison that retail and healthcare are similar in 2020 is relevant, but the response would be stronger with a precise overview and more reliable comparisons across the period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an opening, an overview, and a longer paragraph describing the sectors, so there is some basic organisation. The main trends can be followed, particularly the rise in healthcare and the decline in agriculture. However, progression is limited: the overview repeats information that is then revisited, and the body moves between sectors without a consistent comparison or clear grouping. Linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Moreover” are used, but some do not express a clear contrast or relationship. Organise the details into a logical sequence—for example, compare the rising sectors together, then the declining sectors—and use linking words only where their meaning fits.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “sectors,” “highest,” “gain,” and “falling,” which helps communicate the broad trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, such as “massive gain in jobs,” “it touch the highest,” and “people avoid to work in that field.” Spelling errors, including “Manufaturing,” “beging,” and “similer,” are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause. Aim for precise trend language such as “rose steadily,” “reached a peak,” and “declined,” and describe what the graph shows rather than infer why people work in a sector.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the overall meaning is usually recoverable. However, grammatical errors are frequent, particularly in sentence construction, verb forms, articles, and agreement. For example, “as graph discribe” lacks a correctly formed clause, while “the healthcare had massive gain” and “it gain over 15 millions” show problems with articles, verb forms, and number agreement. Punctuation and spacing also make some sentences difficult to read, as in “number.On the other hand” and “Manufaturing,Retail.” Practise building accurate sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check past-tense forms and singular/plural agreement when describing historical data.

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