Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE LINE GRAPH DEPICTS DATAILS REGARDING THE NUMBER OF JOBS IN FOUR PARTS OF THE ECONOMY IN THE US BETWEEN 1960 AND 2020.

OVERALL,IT CAN BE NOTICED JOBS IN MILLIONS THROUGHOUT THE YEARS.HOWEVER IN THE LATER YEARS SOME JOBS OPPORTUNITI'S GET DOWN.

TO BEGIN WITH IN 1960,IN THE HEALTHCARE FIELD JOB ARE IN HIGH DEMAND THROUGHOUT THE YEARS.2 MILLIONS JOBS IN 1960 IT RISE IN 2020 UNTIL THE 15 MILLIONS.IT IS REGULARLY UP AND CREATES THE OPPORTUNITY.MOREOVER,IN RETAIL DEPARTMENT 5.5 MILLIONS JOBS ARE OPEN IN 1960 AND ITS INCREASE OVER THE YERS TILL 15 MILLIONS IN 2020.

BY ANALYSE THE CHART,AGRICULTUE SECTOR HIRING A PEOPLE AROUND 5 MILLIONS IN 1960.BUT,IT DECREASE TO HIRED PEOPLE OVER THE YEARS.IT IS CONTINUIOSLY DOWN TILL 2020.HOWEVER,MANUFACTURING PART IT IS HIGH DEMANDS OF JOBS IN 1960 IT IS 15 MILLIONS.IT RISE TO 20 MILLIONS IN 1980.BUT,AFTER 1980 IT'S CONSISTANTLY DOWN UP TO 2020.IT IS ONE OF THE MAJOE FALLDOWN IN THE GRAPH.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the four sectors and report several important trends, including manufacturing peaking at 20 million in 1980 before declining, and agriculture falling over time. However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate: “some jobs opportunities get down” does not summarise the main contrast, and healthcare and retail both rise rather than showing a general decline in later years. Some figures are also misreported: healthcare reaches about 16 million, not 15 million, and retail is about 6 million in 1960, not 5.5 million. The response is 147 words, below the 150-word minimum; the 10 words copied from the prompt are excluded. Develop a clearer overview and report the key comparisons more accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an attempted overview, and two body paragraphs grouping sectors. This gives the reader some organisation, and transitions such as “Moreover,” “However,” and “after 1980” indicate relationships between points. However, progression is weakened by the vague overview and by abrupt, sometimes unclear links between ideas. For example, “Overall, it can be noticed jobs in millions throughout the years” does not communicate a complete point, while the healthcare and retail discussion shifts between trends without clear comparison. Several connectors are used mechanically or with incorrect punctuation. Make the overview a complete summary of the main trends, then group rising sectors together and declining sectors together, using clear links between sentences.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “line graph,” “sector,” “increase,” “decrease,” and “consistently,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make the description difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “jobs are open,” “creates the opportunity,” “hiring a people,” and “major falldown” are not natural ways to describe employment figures. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “datails,” “agricultue,” “continuiosly,” and “majoe.” Use precise terms such as “employment,” “the number of jobs,” “rose,” and “declined,” and check spelling carefully. This would make the account clearer and more appropriate for an academic graph summary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some sentence variety, including contrast with “However” and a time clause beginning “after 1980,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns and many are incomplete or inaccurately formed. Examples include “Overall, it can be noticed jobs in millions throughout the years” and “It rise to 20 millions,” where the clause structure and verb form are faulty. There are repeated problems with subject–verb agreement, articles, plurals, and tense, as in “job are,” “it decrease,” and “2 millions jobs.” Commas are also frequently attached to the following word, making the text harder to read. Practise writing complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and past-tense forms when describing historical data.

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