Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This line graph demonstrate and give knowledge about jobs in four different sectors of the economy in united state of America between 1960 and 2020.

In this line graph there are four sectors manufacturing,retail,agriculture and healthcare.overall there is fluctuations in different sectors of economy.Firstly there is a sharp decline in manufacturing sector. On the other hand there is a huge increase in healthcare sector. However agriculture has a minor increase in overall trend.

In manufacturing sector in 1960 to 1998 there is increase by 5 million jobs after that 1980 to 2020 there is decrease in overall trend. In retail sector there is continious increase in the job sector and overall the trend is positive. Moreover there is a decrease in the agriculture sector from 1960 to 2020 as overall the trend is negative and there is a huige fall in the job maret in agriculture sector. Therefore, in health sector the over all trend is increasing and there is rise in the job sector of health care in Us economy between 1960 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify all four sectors and report the broad contrast between declining manufacturing and agriculture and rising healthcare and retail. However, the overview is not consistently accurate: agriculture decreases overall, rather than showing the “minor increase” stated earlier, and manufacturing rises to 20 million in 1980 before falling, not from 1960 to 1998. The response also misses key comparisons, such as healthcare catching up with retail at about 16 million by 2020, while manufacturing remains lower at around 13 million. Several trends are described generally without supporting figures, so the main features are only partly developed. Give a precise overview, then select a few accurate figures to support each important trend.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic structure: an introduction, an overview, and a paragraph describing sector trends. This gives the reader some organisation, and linking phrases such as “On the other hand” and “Moreover” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is limited because the final paragraph moves repeatedly between sectors without a clear order or supporting data. Some connectors do not express the relationship accurately, and repeated phrases such as “overall the trend” make the account feel repetitive. The overview also contains conflicting information about agriculture. Organise the details in a consistent sequence—for example, rising sectors followed by declining sectors—and use linking words only where they clarify a genuine comparison or contrast.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant vocabulary for describing trends, including “sharp decline,” “increase,” “decrease,” and “positive.” This is enough to communicate the general subject, but the range is limited and several expressions are inaccurate or repetitive. Phrases such as “give knowledge about jobs,” “huge fall in the job maret,” and “rise in the job sector of health care” are not natural ways to describe graph data. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “continious,” “huige,” and “maret,” which reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of trend expressions and use standard sector names consistently; for example, describe a sector’s employment as rising, falling, peaking, or remaining stable.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the reader can usually understand the main message. However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “This line graph demonstrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “overall there is fluctuations” uses an incorrect verb form and noun construction. The sentence beginning “In manufacturing sector in 1960 to 1998” is difficult to follow because its time references and clause structure are unclear. Capitalisation and spacing around sentence boundaries are also inconsistent. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, such as “Manufacturing employment rose from 15 million in 1960 to 20 million in 1980, then declined,” before adding more complex comparisons.

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