Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the available graph illustrates the job details reported by four sectors took part in economy of usa in 1960 to 2020.

at first it is observed that highiest jobs porportion about15 million jobs contributed by manufacturing department in 1960 which was drop down in 1980 and gradually fell down to 13 million in 2020. second most contributer was retail sector only 6 million job recoreds was reported in 1960 and gradually rise upto 16 million counted as topof list which is equall to ratio of vacancies showed by healthcare department too.however agriculture field was one of have less number of jobs only 6 million at 1960 but numbers descreased .

therefore after deep observation of graph it is conclude that retail sector is one of the famous department which offer sufficient number of jobs followed by healthcare in between 1960 to 2020 on the other hand manufacturing and agriculral jobs drop down annualy till 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant features, including manufacturing’s high starting point and the growth of retail and healthcare, and you note that agriculture declined. However, the account is only partial and some key details are inaccurate or unclear. Manufacturing rose from 15 million to 20 million in 1980 before falling to 13 million; your statement that it “drop down in 1980” reverses this important stage. Retail and healthcare both reached about 16 million by 2020, but the response does not clearly explain their different paths or that healthcare rose steadily from 2 million. The overview also calls retail “one of the famous department,” which does not describe the graph’s main trends. Select the major changes accurately and summarise them clearly before adding supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall shape: an introduction, a paragraph describing sectors, and a concluding statement. This gives the reader some sense of organisation, and words such as “however” and “therefore” attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is not consistently clear: several sectors and comparisons are crowded into one long paragraph, and the conclusion repeats earlier points rather than providing a distinct overview. The sequence of manufacturing, retail, and agriculture also leaves healthcare’s trend insufficiently explained. Some linking expressions do not show a clear relationship between the ideas they join. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main comparisons, and group sectors with similar trends to make the information easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary related to employment and change, including “contributed,” “gradually,” “decreased,” and “sufficient number of jobs.” However, the range is limited by repeated or imprecise expressions, and several word choices make the meaning difficult to interpret. For example, “job details reported by four sectors took part in economy” is not a natural way to introduce the chart, while “famous department” does not convey employment levels. There are also noticeable spelling errors, such as “highiest,” “recoreds,” and “agriculral.” These issues fit a response with a minimally adequate but inconsistent vocabulary range. Prefer precise chart language such as “number of jobs,” “employment,” “rose,” and “fell,” and check spelling and collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, including a comparison joined with “however,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms and agreement occur in phrases such as “it is conclude,” “numbers descreased,” and “retail sector … was reported.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also weak: the long sentence beginning “second most contributer” runs several ideas together, making the relationships hard to follow. Articles and sentence construction are sometimes missing or awkward, as in “at 1960” and “which was drop down.” These frequent errors can cause difficulty for the reader, despite the general meaning being recoverable. Build shorter, complete sentences first, then practise accurate past-tense forms and agreement before combining comparisons.

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