Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The following line chart illustrate the information about the number of job in four sectors of the economy in the us between 1960 and 2020 In manufacturing at first from 1960 number of job slightly increase but from1990 graph started to fall .In 2020 number of jobs in manufacturing fall to 13 million. In Retail number of job gradually increase from 1960 to 1990 and 2000.From 2000 to 2020 number of jobs there little bit change compare to zero change .In 2020 there is 16 million number of jobs in retail In agriculture number of job fall from 1960 to 2020. 6 million jobs to 2 million jobs. And in last healthcare number of jobs icrease fron 1960 to 2020 from 2 million job to 16 million jobs. In 2020 retail and healthcare have same number of jobs. In conclusion demand of number of jobs in manufacturing first increase then decrease. retail and healthcare both increase but number of jobs in agriculture decrease from 1960 to 2020.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the four sectors and report several key trends, including manufacturing’s rise and later decline, agriculture’s overall fall, and healthcare’s growth to 16 million jobs. The comparison that retail and healthcare reached the same level in 2020 is also accurate. However, some details are unclear or inaccurate: manufacturing began at 15 million and peaked at 20 million in 1980, but the response does not give these figures and says the decline began from “1990,” whereas the chart shows the change after 1980. Retail rose to 15 million by 2000 and then increased slightly to 16 million, not “zero change.” The overview is present but repeats trends rather than selecting and summarising the most important comparisons clearly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a generally sensible order, discussing manufacturing, retail, agriculture and healthcare, and it ends with a concluding summary. This gives the reader a basic route through the information. However, the writing is presented as one continuous block, with no clear paragraphing to separate an overview from detailed comparisons. Connections between ideas are often repetitive or awkward, such as “In conclusion” followed by a restatement of earlier points, and “From 2000 to 2020 … compare to zero change” does not clearly explain the trend. Use a short introduction, a distinct overview, and one or two detail paragraphs, with clear links such as “by contrast” and “while.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “increase,” “fall,” “million,” and “same number of jobs,” so the main trends can usually be understood. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repetitive or imprecise. “Number of job” is repeated, while “demand of number of jobs” does not accurately describe what the graph measures. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “icrease” and “fron,” and some unnatural expressions such as “little bit change compare to zero change.” These choices sometimes make the intended comparison harder to follow. Aim for precise reporting verbs and phrases such as “employment rose,” “declined,” and “remained relatively stable.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

Most sentences use simple structures, and the reader can generally identify the intended trends. There are attempts to combine ideas, for example, “In conclusion demand of number of jobs in manufacturing first increase then decrease,” but control of verb forms and sentence construction is inconsistent. Examples include “The following line chart illustrate,” where the subject and verb do not agree, and “number of jobs … fall,” where the tense should be past. Articles and prepositions are also often missing or awkward, as in “In Retail number of job gradually increase.” Punctuation and sentence boundaries are weak, with long stretches running together. Practise accurate past-tense sentences and use full stops to separate each comparison.

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