Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

the graph shows number of jobs in millions in different sectors of economony in US,1960 to 2020.These different sectors are manufacturing,retail,agriculture,and healthcare.graph showing manufacturing15 millions jobs in high rate in 1980 and then slow down in 2020.the lowest job rate is of agriculture sector from 1960 to 2020

overview of graph show different jobs in four sectores of economy illustrate in 60 years period 1960 to 2020.

maufactoring 15 million jobs are in 1960 and 20 millions in 1980.on the other hand retail healthcare and agriculture have lowest jobs are campare to manufacturing the lowest on is agricultural that is 6 milion jobs in 1960 and 3 millions in 2020.manufacturing and healthcare have different jobs rate in diiferent years like healthcare sector have 2 millions jobs in 1960 and manufacturing sectore have 15 million jobs.health care department have highest rate at 2020.

similarly retail sector and agriculture sectore have different number of jobs.in 1960 retail sectore have 6 millions jobs in 1980 have 10 millions jobs and highest rate at 2020 15 millions jobs.While in health care department lowest rate in 1960 is 3 millions jobs and in 1980 5 millions and in 2020 15 millions jobs are at highest point.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the four sectors and make relevant observations, including manufacturing’s peak in 1980 and agriculture’s overall low position. However, the overview is vague and does not clearly summarise the main changes: manufacturing rose and then declined, while retail and healthcare increased, with healthcare catching up with retail by 2020. Some figures and comparisons are inaccurate. For example, agriculture is reported as falling from 6 million to 3 million by 2020, although it ends at about 2 million; healthcare is said to have 3 million jobs in 1960, rather than about 2 million. Retail’s 2020 figure is also given as 15 million instead of about 16 million. Select the key trends and check figures carefully to make the report more complete and reliable.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has some paragraphing and attempts to group information by sector, so the reader can recognise the general topic. However, progression is difficult to follow because the opening and overview repeat similar information, and the body moves between sectors without a clear organising principle. For instance, the paragraph beginning “manufacturing 15 million jobs” shifts from manufacturing to retail, healthcare and agriculture, then returns to healthcare. Linking expressions such as “on the other hand” and “similarly” are used, but do not always signal the relationship between the information accurately. Organise the report into a concise overview followed by paragraphs comparing related trends, and use clear references to avoid repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “manufacturing,” “retail,” “agriculture,” “healthcare,” and “jobs,” which makes the subject identifiable. However, the range is limited and several word-choice, spelling and collocation problems make parts of the report difficult to interpret. Examples include “high rate” for a high number of jobs, “slow down” for a decline, and “lowest on is agricultural,” which obscures the intended comparison. There are also repeated misspellings such as “economony,” “maufactoring” and “sectore.” Use precise terms for trends and comparisons, such as “peaked,” “declined,” “remained stable,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to report figures using both short statements and longer comparisons, but the range of sentence structures is limited and errors are frequent. Many sentences lack articles or a clear verb structure, as in “graph showing manufacturing15 millions jobs in high rate in 1980,” while “the lowest job rate is of agriculture sector” has an awkward grammatical construction. Tense and agreement are also inconsistent: “retail sectore have” should use a past-tense form such as “retail had,” and singular/plural forms are often mismatched. Punctuation and spacing around commas and full stops are inconsistent, making sentence boundaries unclear. Practise complete subject–verb sentences and use consistent past tense when describing the historical data.

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