Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Many people in US do jobs in agriculture,retail,health sectors and many more.But from the year 1960 to 2020,there were ups and downs in the ratio of the jobs.
The graph below shows the ratio of the jobs in four economy sectors in US.The four economy sectors are manufacturing,retail,healthcare and agriculture.
As we can see from the given paragraph.The ratio of manufacturing jobs were.low in 1960,but at the peak in 1980.Furthermore in the year 2020 the ratio of the manufacturing jobs are the lowest.As in the retail profession we can see decline ratios in jobs,in 1960.But in year 2000,there is extreme rise in jobs.By the year 2020 the job ratios has reached its peak.
The demand for jobs were high in the year 1960 in agriculture fields.But by the year 2020,the job ratios in agriculture fields gradually decreased.As we have a look in health care sectors.In the year 1960,the demand for jobs were the lowest.But,by the year 2020,the demand for jobs were the highest.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify all four sectors and describe several broad trends, including manufacturing peaking in 1980 and agriculture declining over time. However, the account is only partly accurate and lacks the key comparisons needed for a clear summary. Manufacturing was not low in 1960: it stood at about 15 million jobs, then peaked at 20 million. By 2020 it had fallen, but was not the lowest sector; agriculture was lowest at about 2 million. Retail did not decline in 1960; it rose from about 6 million, and healthcare and retail both reached roughly 16 million by 2020. Include an overview of the main shifts and support it with accurate figures to develop the response more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has some organisation: it introduces the chart and then discusses manufacturing and retail before agriculture and healthcare. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and the opening repeats information by saying both that the graph shows jobs in four sectors and then naming those sectors. Linking phrases such as “Furthermore,” “As in,” and “As we have a look” are sometimes awkward or do not clearly connect the comparisons. The paragraphing also does not separate an overview from detailed trends. Grouping the sectors by their patterns—for example, rising sectors versus declining sectors—and using clear comparisons would make the information easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use relevant topic vocabulary, including “manufacturing,” “retail,” “agriculture,” and “healthcare,” so the reader can identify the sectors being discussed. However, the range is limited and several repeated or imprecise expressions weaken clarity. “Ratio of the jobs” is not an appropriate way to describe the chart’s figures, which show numbers of jobs, while “demand for jobs” suggests demand rather than employment totals. Phrases such as “extreme rise” and “reached its peak” are also used without precise support. Aim for accurate terms such as “number of jobs,” “employment,” “increased,” and “declined,” and vary these appropriately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt some longer sentence forms, including clauses beginning with “As we can see” and “But by the year 2020,” but control is inconsistent. Errors in agreement and verb forms occur in phrases such as “the ratio … were” and “the job ratios has reached.” Articles and sentence construction are also problematic in “in US do jobs” and “As in the retail profession we can see decline ratios in jobs.” Punctuation and spacing are frequently inaccurate, with missing spaces after commas and a full stop interrupting “were.low.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning harder to follow. Practise accurate simple comparisons first, then combine them using controlled clauses and consistent past-tense forms.
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