Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The line graph provides information about the USA economy which is different four sectors in job given the time periode.

Overall, It can be seen clearly, Manufacturing job had the highest peak than other. While, Agriculture job had the least proportion in 2020.

First of all, Manufactring job is the highest in four sectors. it economy around 15 millions. In 2000, Manufactring is decreased slightly two decade, before it shink at 20 millions peck up. However, Healthcare economy only stood at 2millions, but after they normally increased of 5 Bundle. in 2000, it is rapidly rich at around 10 frtune. in 2020 USA economy high in health job proportion 15 millons.

Second of, Retaill and Agriculture both of stood at 5 millions. in both of you very different. agriculture is dropped in 1980 around 3 burnds. after they stable 20 years. then normally pulment in 2020 recorded at 2 millions. Moreover, REtail job is shink in given year. in 2000 to 2020 is stble it.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify relevant features, including manufacturing as a major sector and agriculture as the smallest by 2020, and you mention several figures. However, the overview is not fully accurate: manufacturing peaked at 20 million in 1980, rather than remaining the highest throughout, and by 2020 retail and healthcare were both about 16 million. Some details are misreported or unclear: retail rose from 6 to 10, 15 and 16 million, but you say it “shink” and do not describe its upward trend; manufacturing fell after 1980, not after 2000. The response therefore covers the graph only partially, with limited and sometimes unclear reporting. Select the main trends accurately and compare the sectors across the period in a clear overview and supporting details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response with an introduction, an overview and two body paragraphs. The sequence from manufacturing and healthcare to retail and agriculture gives the reader some sense of grouping, and phrases such as “Overall” and “Moreover” signal connections. However, progression is difficult to follow because several sentences are incomplete or unclear, and the comparisons are not consistently developed. For example, “In both of you very different” does not explain the contrast, while “in 2000 to 2020 is stble it” leaves the retail trend unresolved. Linking words are sometimes inaccurate or mechanical. Use one paragraph for the overview and organise the details by clear trends, with each sentence stating a complete comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt vocabulary suited to describing a graph, including “increased,” “decreased,” “stable” and “proportion,” and you use some relevant sector names. However, the range is limited and many word-choice, spelling and collocation errors make the meaning difficult to recover. Examples include “Manufactring,” “shink,” “peck up,” “Bundle,” “frtune” and “pulment”; these do not communicate the intended trends reliably. Phrases such as “highest peak” and “job proportion” are also unnatural in this context. Build a reliable set of trend expressions and check spelling carefully. Prefer precise, familiar wording such as “rose steadily,” “fell to,” “reached a peak of,” and “remained stable,” rather than attempting unclear alternatives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response includes some simple sentences and attempts to connect ideas with clauses, as in “However, Healthcare economy only stood at 2millions, but after they normally increased…”. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors are frequent enough to obscure relationships between figures and time periods. Examples include “Manufacturing job had the highest peak,” “In 2000, Manufactring is decreased,” and “agriculture is dropped,” where tense and sentence construction are not controlled. Articles, plurals and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “the least proportion” and “they stable.” Punctuation and capitalisation are uneven, with sentence starts often in lowercase. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and complete subject–verb sentences before adding more complex clauses.

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