Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The line graph illustrates the data of total number of jobs in four different sectors which is manufacturing, retail, agriculture, healthcare over the period of 60 years starting from 1960 to 2020 in United state. The units are measured in millions.

Overall, The highest number of job in starting years is in manufacturing sector and in contradiction the smallest number of job in starting year is in healthcare sector. Futhermore, retail and agriculture sector host equal number of job in the beginning.

Regrading highest and lowest number of job, manufacturing sector consist huge amount of job in the beginning year with 15 millions at 1960 and closely followed by 20, 17 in remaining year i.e, 1980 & 2000 and then last with 13 million job in 2020. Then, healthcare sector in opposite had small number of job in 1960 with 3 million but faced upward trend in remaining year and last with 16 millions job in 2020.

In addition, retail and agriculture sectors had the equal number of job which is 6 millions. After that, retail sector showed upward trend by having 10 million in 1980, 15 millions in 2000 and 16 millions in 2020 same as healthcare sector. However, agricultre sector faced loss in number of job by carrying 4,4 and 3 millions in 1980,2000 and 2020 year respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main overall pattern: manufacturing is highest initially, while healthcare rises and retail grows to match it by 2020; agriculture declines. The response also includes figures for all four sectors, so the key features are covered. However, several details are inaccurate: healthcare starts at 2 million, not 3, and agriculture is about 3 million in both 1980 and 2000 and 2 million in 2020, rather than 4, 4 and 3. The overview focuses on the starting-year ranking but would be stronger if it highlighted the major changes over the whole period, especially healthcare and retail reaching 16 million and manufacturing falling after 1980. Some comparisons and trends are therefore less fully reported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs grouping manufacturing with healthcare and retail with agriculture. This makes the information reasonably easy to follow. Linking expressions such as “Overall,” “In addition,” and “However” help signal relationships, although some are used mechanically or do not express the relationship precisely; “Regrading highest and lowest” is also an unclear transition. The overview and later paragraphs repeat the initial ranking, while the sequence of figures is sometimes compressed into awkward phrases such as “closely followed by 20, 17 in remaining year.” Use clearer topic sentences and connect each figure explicitly to its year. More precise referencing would also help readers distinguish the sectors and their trends.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing a line graph, including “upward trend,” “followed,” “equal number,” and “in contrast,” and the meaning is generally understandable. However, several word choices and collocations are unnatural or imprecise, such as “the data of total number of jobs,” “host equal number,” “huge amount of job,” and “faced loss in number of job.” There are also spelling errors, including “Futhermore,” “Regrading,” and “agricultre,” which reduce accuracy. Aim for standard chart language and consistent forms: for example, describe a sector as “employing” a number of people or say that employment “rose” or “declined.” Avoid repeating “number of job” when “employment” or “jobs” is more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “which” and “while,” and the main trends can usually be understood. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly with articles, agreement, plurals, and sentence construction. For example, “in United state” needs an article and the plural form, while “the smallest number of job” and “16 millions job” show problems with number and noun forms. The sentence beginning “manufacturing sector consist” also has subject–verb agreement and tense issues, and “closely followed by 20, 17” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Check that each sentence has a complete clause, use past tense consistently for the historical data, and review singular/plural agreement and punctuation.

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