Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph includes the information of four diiferent sector for time of sixty year. Iniatiall t]i we look at the grapgh the no of jobs ratio is the highest for manufacturing sector for a period of fourty years, than drop it gradually in the next two decades. Comparatively the retail sector grow smooothly for the first fourty years than slows down, while the healthcare sectors are uniformly growing over a period of times. Although the Agriculture sector drops significantly in the inial period of twenty years. There seem no apparently clear increase for many decades. This graph insights that healthcare sector were the most smoothly growing part and will remain relevent in the future. Humans need health care and this sector is essential for running a healthy society. perhaps it is the most important of all. On one hand agriculture sector which should be uplift as it considred the life line of any economy but its growth remains stcuk for producing more jobs.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several relevant trends: manufacturing is initially the largest sector, retail and healthcare rise, and agriculture declines. However, the account is only partly developed and includes unsupported commentary about future relevance and the importance of healthcare and agriculture, which does not summarise the graph. Some descriptions are also inaccurate or unclear: manufacturing falls after 1980 rather than after “fourty years,” and retail continues to rise through 2020 rather than slowing down. Include a concise overview of the main changes and compare the endpoints—for example, healthcare and retail both reach about 16 million jobs by 2020, while agriculture is lowest. Keep the focus on what the data show rather than predictions or opinions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response moves through the sectors in a generally understandable order, and contrast markers such as “Comparatively” and “Although” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, there is no clear paragraph structure or distinct overview, so the reader has to infer the main message from a continuous sequence of statements. Some links are awkward or unclear, particularly “Although the Agriculture sector drops…” followed by “There seem no apparently clear increase for many decades.” The final discussion shifts from describing trends to arguing that sectors should be uplifted, interrupting the report’s progression. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing the data, using linking words only where the relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary for describing trends, including “gradually,” “uniformly growing,” and “drops significantly.” However, word choice and spelling errors are frequent enough to make some phrases difficult to interpret, such as “the information of four diiferent sector,” “the graph insights,” and “growth remains stcuk.” Several expressions are also imprecise for a data report: “jobs ratio” does not describe the number of jobs, and “smoothly” is less suitable than a direct description of a steady rise. Use accurate terms such as “number of jobs,” “increased steadily,” and “declined,” and check spelling and collocations carefully. Avoid evaluative phrases such as “life line” when the task calls for neutral reporting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast clause beginning “Although” and a sentence using “while.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors in sentence structure, agreement, articles, and verb forms sometimes make the meaning unclear. For example, “the healthcare sectors are uniformly growing” has an agreement problem, while “There seem no apparently clear increase” is not grammatically complete. The opening sentence also lacks a clear grammatical structure. Practise forming accurate subject–verb patterns and complete sentences before adding complex clauses. For instance, write “Healthcare employment grew steadily throughout the period” and “Agricultural employment fell between 1960 and 1980, then declined slightly.”

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