Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This graph shows information about number of jobs in four sectors of US economy throughout 1960 to 2020.

First of all, from the start agriculture and retail was having the same level in millions. After sometime agriculture decrease till last level of jobs 1 to 2020 year, while in 1980 and 2000 was having more .

At the same moment retail has increased for around to 16-17 level jobs in millions.

However, agriculture and retail jobs was having the same level from the inception.

Afterward, there is healthcare job , levelig in 3 level of jobs in millions , but step by step got improvment , and now placing at the same place with retail.

The last one is manufacturing , which one was having the top of list till 2000 year, then now located in 13 level of jobs in millions.

For conclusion, the jobs which one was not valueable for 1960 and 1980 now have the highest level in the list.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify several important trends: manufacturing is highest initially and then declines, while healthcare rises and finishes level with retail. However, some details are inaccurate or unclear. Agriculture falls to about 2 million jobs by 2020, not “1,” and it does not have more jobs in 1980 and 2000; it is below retail at both points. The statement that agriculture and retail had the same level “from the inception” also conflicts with your description of agriculture declining. Your overview is only partly clear, and the response omits key comparisons, such as retail’s steady rise and manufacturing’s peak around 1980. Select the main trends accurately and summarise them clearly before giving supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is some organisation, with an opening sentence followed by descriptions of the sectors and a concluding statement. However, the progression is difficult to follow because the sectors are not grouped or compared consistently, and the agriculture-and-retail comparison is repeated in contradictory ways. Phrases such as “At the same moment” and “Afterward” do not always show a clear relationship between the information. The conclusion introduces a broad claim about jobs that were “not valueable” without explaining it. Use a clear overview, then organise the details into logical comparisons—for example, rising sectors together and declining sectors together—and use linking expressions only where they accurately signal the relationship.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary includes some relevant terms, such as “increased,” “highest level,” and “manufacturing,” so the reader can recognise the topic and general trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear: “last level of jobs,” “levelig in 3 level,” and “not valueable” are not natural ways to describe the data. Spelling errors such as “improvment” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise trend language and standard collocations, such as “fell to,” “remained stable at,” and “rose steadily.” This will help you report changes and comparisons more clearly without relying repeatedly on “level” and “jobs in millions.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts a few longer sentence forms, but most sentences rely on simple patterns, and frequent errors sometimes make the relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “agriculture and retail was having” has a subject–verb agreement problem, while “After sometime agriculture decrease” uses an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “Afterward, there is healthcare job” also has problems with articles and sentence structure. Tense control is inconsistent when describing the historical graph. Practise using the past simple consistently for changes over time, with accurate subjects and verbs—for example, “Agriculture fell, while retail rose.” Then add a few controlled complex sentences to compare trends.

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