Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The chart shows the numberof jobs in four sectors of economy.
Overall, The graph illustrate the information about the number of jobs in four different sectors of the economy in the us in sertain period of time.
As we can see that there is higest number job in the manufacturing sector at the starting of the survey which is in 1960 but at the ending of 2020 it is decreasing in decreasing order in compare to beginning of the survey.
In 1960, healthcare has lest jobs among the people but till 2020 it has been gradually change and it has become the higest number of job sectors of the economy followed by retail business while on the other hand agriculture is at the average point of the survey at the 1960 but till the 2020 is has been decreasing from it's initial position and becomes the lowest among these four job sectors.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify the broad pattern that manufacturing starts as the largest sector and declines, while healthcare rises from the smallest to one of the largest. However, the report is only 144 words, below the 150-word minimum, and the overview is vague: it does not clearly state that retail also rises or that retail and healthcare both reach about 16 million jobs in 2020. Some details are inaccurate or unclear, such as calling agriculture “at the average point” in 1960; it was tied with retail at about 6 million. To strengthen the response, include a concise overview of the main contrasts and support it with key figures across the years, including manufacturing’s peak in 1980 and the steady fall in agriculture.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a basic paragraph structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to comparisons, and phrases such as “while on the other hand” show an attempt to connect contrasting trends. However, progression is limited because the overview repeats the introduction rather than summarising the main features, and the final paragraph combines several sectors in a long, difficult-to-follow sentence. Some linking is awkward or repetitive, including “but at the ending” and “while on the other hand.” Organise the details into clearer comparisons—for example, rising sectors together and declining sectors together—and use linking words only where they clarify the relationship between figures.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some relevant task vocabulary, including “manufacturing sector,” “healthcare,” “agriculture,” and “decreasing,” so the reader can identify the subject and broad trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which makes parts of the report unclear: “highest number job,” “average point,” and “decreasing in decreasing order” do not express the data naturally. There are also noticeable spelling and word-form errors, such as “higest,” “lest,” and “sertain.” Aim for precise trend language and standard collocations, such as “the number of jobs,” “the lowest figure,” “rose steadily,” and “fell gradually.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast between healthcare and agriculture in the final paragraph. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, so the reader has to work to follow the meaning. Examples include “Overall, The graph illustrate,” where the verb does not agree with the subject, and “it has been gradually change,” which has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “As we can see that” is also awkwardly constructed, while punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent. Practise accurate past-tense reporting and build shorter comparison sentences first, checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and verb forms before combining ideas.
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