Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below gives information about the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US, 1960-2020

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph represents the number of jobs in four sectors of the economy in the US between 1960 and 2020.

There are four sectors :

1) Manufacturing

2) Retail

3) Agriculture

4) Healthcare

1) Manufacturing:

The jobs in manufacturing sector are about 15 millions in 1960 and it gradullay grown while going to the year 1980 as there is more need of workers in this sector but in the year 2000 the jobs vacancy was reduced from 20 billion to 17 billion and its even more decreased in the year 2020 from 17 billion to 12 billion.

2) Retail:

In the retail industry there was out 6 million of job vacancy in the year 1960. The jobs got increased for the the year 190 to 2020 in high basis from 10 million in 1980 to 15 million in 2000 to 16 million in 2020 this sector has gradual increase in its job vacancie's.

3) Agriculture:

The third is the agriculture sector this is most important sector but there is no higher job vacancy here in this sector comapred to the other sectors.

In the year 1960 its has upto 6 million which was gradually decreased in the next 3 years to for the years 1980 and 2000 they went down to 3 million but in the year 2020 it was drasticlly decreased to 1 million.

4)Healthcare:

Healthcare is one most growing sector because health is one of the most important aspect in our life's health is more important than anything. At starting there was only 2 million of job's for this sector but there was a huge growth for this sector and the job's also became demandable in 1980 it was 5milion then in 2000 it went up to 11 million and in 2020 it wwas 16 milion which reached the retail industry

There was huge difference among all the sectors in all the four yers

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You cover all four sectors and report several key figures, including manufacturing’s peak at 20 million in 1980 and healthcare’s rise to 16 million by 2020. However, the response is only partly effective as a summary: it lacks a clear overview of the main trends and comparisons, and instead gives separate numbered descriptions. Some figures are inaccurate: manufacturing in 2020 is about 13 million, not 12; agriculture is about 2 million, not 1; and the retail period is 1980, not “190.” The claim that agriculture is “most important” is not supported by the graph. Focus on the overall pattern—manufacturing declines after 1980, retail and healthcare rise, and agriculture falls—and report the data accurately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The numbered sections make it possible to identify which sector each paragraph discusses, and the response follows the chart’s categories. However, this format produces a list-like account rather than a clear progression from an overview to grouped details. The opening only introduces the graph, while the final sentence, “There was huge difference among all the sectors,” is too general to function as a useful conclusion. Connections within paragraphs are sometimes repetitive, especially the repeated use of “in the year” and “then.” Organise the response into an introduction, a concise overview, and detail paragraphs that compare related trends; use linking expressions to show contrast and change without repeating the same pattern.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary such as “manufacturing,” “retail,” “agriculture,” “healthcare,” and “gradual increase,” so the reader can generally follow the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate for describing employment data. “Job vacancy” is repeated where “number of jobs” or “employment” is more suitable, and “jobs demandable” is unclear. “Billion” is also used for figures that the chart gives in millions, which changes their meaning. Spelling errors such as “gradullay,” “comapred,” and “drasticlly” further reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of trend verbs and employment terms, and check spelling and units carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts longer sentences with time clauses and comparisons, for example, “the jobs got increased … from 10 million in 1980 to 15 million in 2000.” However, complex sentences are often faulty, and frequent errors make parts difficult to read. Examples include “it gradullay grown,” “its has upto 6 million,” and “there was out 6 million,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement, and sentence construction. Articles and plurals are also inconsistent, as in “in manufacturing sector” and “job’s.” Some sentences run together without clear punctuation, particularly the healthcare description. Practise accurate simple trend sentences first, then combine them using controlled clauses and check tense, agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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