Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Build a vertically type apartments for people to give them large number of homes in big cities.I strongly agree with this statement because this way help to saves the land for housing and tall apartments are less expensive than other traditional homes.
Firstly,I agree with above statement because tall apartments help us to save the land for housing puropses.If we construct apartments rather than housing societies than it will be helpful for us to manage the more population of people in small space.Most of our commercial shops are constructing in tall apartment blocks.there are lot of businesses there like mobile shops,hair dresser shops and other kinds of shops.For example,Burj khalifa is the best example of vertically buildings many commercial and residential blocks are conjusted in small space are due to its way of build.
Moreover,large apartments also less expensive as compare to traditional homes.It also provide a chance to save our money and also secure our life.In apartments we have no threat about our privacy and security because company provide us security guards on the main door of every floor.In tall buildings we also enhance our businesses.For example,a person who buy a flat in any apartment he only pay money and not to do anything without shifting by this he save his money on the otherhand,a person who buy land and then construct home there it is very complicated as compare to buy a flat in any building.
In conclusion, the better way to provide many houses in big cities is to construct tall apartment blocks.I agree with this statement because by htis people also save their money and time and also helpful in to save land for housing purposes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
Your position is clear from the introduction and conclusion: you strongly agree that tall apartment blocks can provide homes in large cities. You give two relevant reasons—using less land and being less expensive—and support them with examples such as Burj Khalifa and the comparison between buying a flat and building a house. This addresses the task, but the reasons are not developed equally or always explained clearly. For instance, the discussion of shops and businesses in tall buildings does not fully show how this supports the provision of homes, while the claims about privacy and security need clearer links to affordability and housing supply. Explain the practical impact of each reason and make the examples more precise to develop your argument further.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “Firstly” and “Moreover,” and a conclusion. The main ideas generally progress from land use to cost, so the overall arrangement is coherent. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. The first body paragraph moves from saving land to commercial shops without explaining the relationship, and the example about Burj Khalifa is difficult to follow. In the second paragraph, several points about cost, security, business, and construction are grouped together, making the central argument less focused. Use clearer links between each claim and its supporting explanation, and ensure that pronouns such as “this” refer unmistakably to a specific idea.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “tall apartment blocks,” “population,” “commercial,” “residential,” and “security guards,” which helps communicate the subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making ideas difficult to understand. Examples include “vertically type apartments,” “housing puropses,” “conjusted,” and “as compare to.” Spelling errors such as “htis” and “puropses” also reduce accuracy. Aim to use standard phrases for urban housing and land use, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish between apartment buildings, housing developments, and the land-saving benefits you want to describe.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a conditional-style comparison beginning “a person who buy a flat” and a reason introduced by “because.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “this way help to saves” has problems with subject–verb agreement and verb form, while “large apartments also less expensive” is missing a verb. There are also errors with articles, plurals, and sentence boundaries, as in “in tall apartment blocks.there are lot of businesses.” Work on forming complete clauses, matching verbs to their subjects, and using articles consistently. Breaking long sentences into clearer units will also improve punctuation and control.
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