Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

yes i agreed to this approach of constructing tall apartment blocks in metro cities to give more homes.

the reasons for this approach is that people come more in metroplaten cities because of diffirent challenges like earning, education and medical etc purposes. People have lesser job opportunities and career growth in small cities. for example ppsc jobs. people has less to no facility of healthcare in small cities so they come to visit large cities for their cure. for example if some one has cancer disease they have to settle in large cities people has no quality education so they move for their childern. for example if someone wanted to pursue a/0 level education there is no option in small cities. so due to these reason people come to cities specailly metroplaten ones in large chunks to manage these number of immigration in less space talls buildings help alot to cover less space and giving more homes.for example in dubai more people come so you seen large buildings all around. even this approach is helpful to the people as large and wider houses are out of budget for most people. for example in islambad the houses and costly so tall building give them a budget friendly option.

on otherside if wider buildings made it cover more space which lead to increase in budget even accomodate less people and camprison to chase for home increase so yes i dislike this idea i like the approach of constructing tall building blocks in metroplaten cities to providing budget friendly space less homes to more people

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a position in favour of tall apartment blocks and give relevant reasons, including migration to cities for work, healthcare and education, as well as affordability. The examples of cancer treatment, A-level education, Dubai and Islamabad help connect the discussion to real situations. However, the response does not consistently develop these points: several examples are listed quickly, and the explanation of how high-rise construction provides enough homes is brief. The final sentence also introduces “wider buildings” as a contrast, but the comparison is difficult to follow and the wording “I dislike this idea” conflicts with your stated support. Make your position explicit and consistent, then explain one or two reasons in greater depth, including how apartment blocks address housing demand and any relevant limitation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a recognisable overall direction: you support high-rise housing, explain why people move to large cities, and mention affordability. Examples such as “for example ppsc jobs” and the reference to Dubai show an attempt to support points. However, ideas are presented in one long paragraph, with little separation between reasons, examples and the conclusion. The repeated use of “for example” and “so” makes the links mechanical, while some transitions do not clarify the relationship between ideas. The final contrast beginning “on otherside” is especially hard to follow. Use separate paragraphs for your position, supporting reasons and conclusion, and connect each example directly to the point it illustrates with clearer linking phrases and reference.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “apartment blocks,” “job opportunities,” “healthcare,” “quality education” and “budget friendly.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main subject, but the range is limited and several inaccurate or repetitive choices make parts difficult to understand. Examples include “metroplaten cities,” “large chunks,” “cover less space,” and “chase for home”; these do not express the intended ideas naturally. Spelling errors such as “diffirent,” “childern” and “accomodate” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of housing and urbanisation terms, and check collocations and spelling. For instance, describe people as “moving in large numbers” and buildings as “accommodating more residents.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining that people move for employment, healthcare and education. However, sentence structures are mostly simple or joined into long, poorly controlled strings, and frequent errors can make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “the reasons for this approach is,” “people has less,” and “tall building blocks … to providing,” which show problems with subject–verb agreement and verb forms. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also often missing, as in the extended passage beginning “people come more in metroplaten cities.” Use shorter, complete sentences and check agreement, articles and verb patterns. Then practise combining clauses with accurate connectors, rather than joining many ideas with “so.”

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