Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Constructing immense apartment blocks is excellent way to provide much homes in crowded metropolitan areas. It contains almost greater population of the cities in it, and provide them a better living style in a quite cheap prices. I strongly agree that building such apartments is beneficial for promoting public housing development.

Nowadays, building apartments is on trending by following a simple design and reasonable price materials. It covers approximately half of the city population because it provides a better quality of life with many facilities such as near schools, hospitals and public transportation. It consists of more than 15 floors and all of its storeys are well lighted and decorated. It provides gas pipes, water availability and electricity which checked everyday. Mostly people prefer to live there due to these facilities, furthermore apartments often constructed near the city center. Regarding this, it becomes more beneficial for elderly people as they can go to nearby recreational areas for freshment and young youth can obtain more benefits like going institutes by feet. For instance, apartments can accommodate fewer and more people according to the residents living style if they can adjust there then it would be a better place to live.

On the other hand, living in apartments can be suffocating as it does not contain a big house for living, and often it provides a single room of small space. Its often provided facilities would not work properly in case if suddenly an emergency came out then they can not provide even a single service at time because it needs maintenance of the road and clearance of traffic but mostly apartments located near the city center so it becomes difficult to support it. For example, building too much apartments can lead to occupation of more valuable lands under crisis which make a country progress less economically.

In conclusion, I would say building apartments have significantly better living costs even a poor person can afford it and enjoy its benefits.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You take a clear position in favour of tall apartment blocks and give relevant reasons, including affordability, access to services and the possibility of overcrowding or maintenance problems. The counterpoint in the third paragraph shows awareness that the approach has drawbacks. However, the response only partly develops the central question of whether this is the best way to provide enough homes: several claims, such as apartments accommodating “fewer and more people” and occupying valuable land, are unclear or not explained. The conclusion repeats the affordability point but does not weigh the advantages against the disadvantages or clarify the extent of your agreement. Develop fewer, more specific arguments and explain how each supports your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs presenting benefits and drawbacks, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from facilities to elderly residents, young people and capacity without clearly connecting each point to the main argument. Linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “Regarding this,” and “On the other hand” are used, but some connections feel mechanical or do not clarify the relationship between ideas. References such as “it” and “they” are sometimes difficult to follow. Organise each body paragraph around one main claim, then support it with a clear explanation and example, using more precise referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to urban housing, including “metropolitan areas,” “public transportation,” “maintenance,” and “economically.” This gives you some useful topic coverage, but the range is limited by repeated general words such as “provides,” “benefits,” and “facilities,” and several noticeable word-choice or collocation errors make parts difficult to interpret. Examples include “much homes,” “on trending,” “better living style,” and “young youth.” Some expressions, such as “freshment” and “occupation of more valuable lands under crisis,” do not communicate the intended meaning clearly. Build a bank of natural housing-related collocations and check word forms and combinations in context; this will make your arguments more precise and easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses beginning with “because,” “as,” and “if.” However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty; errors occur frequently enough to make some ideas harder to follow. For example, “It contains almost greater population … and provide them” has problems with sentence construction and subject–verb agreement, while “which checked everyday” lacks a correctly formed verb phrase. Articles, plurals and agreement also need attention, as in “building apartments have” and “a single room of small space.” Practise building accurate sentences with one main clause and a clearly attached supporting clause, then check verb forms, agreement and articles.

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