Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Nowadays, cities are becoming increasingly overcrowded, so constructing high-rise apartment buildings could help provide housing for more people.The most effective method to provide sufficient homes in large cities would be building a tall apartment blocks where everyone can stay.In this essay i would talk about ,to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

First and foremost,i believe that providing tall apartment blocks is a good choice,because in many cities it is not convenient to build a house .If we build a house it can only consit of a family but comparing to an apartment it would be more easy for many people to live in a same apartment over a 50 to 60 families would be living there.For example,i used to live in an apartmnet it was so affordable.If we choose a house it won't be affordable for students to get that.And also think about if we live in a crowded city and many people will be living there because of the job opportunites that they will get there,so if every family can live in an apartment it would be easy for them to make a space for other places like park or any kind of relaxing area.So during the free time they can spend their time there alone or with thier beloved ones.

Secondly,there are also some disadvatages for providing tall apartment blocks as home ,as everyone choose to live in an apartment residents may have limited access to natural surroundings.For example,in many apartments there won't be any open spacious place for our own.In an apartment it belong to everyone those who live there so people can't have it as their own.

In conclusion,i think bulding tall apartment blocks would be a good option to provide citizens a good home ,because it can help us to make less congested surroundings.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the topic and give a generally supportive position, explaining that apartments can house more families, be affordable for students, and leave space for parks. The personal example of living in an apartment is relevant. You also acknowledge a drawback: residents may have limited access to natural surroundings. However, the discussion is only partly developed. For instance, the claim that apartments create space for parks is not explained in detail, and the disadvantage is not weighed against your overall support. The introduction also says you will discuss the extent of your agreement without stating it clearly until the conclusion. State your position directly at the outset and develop each reason with a clearer explanation or specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “First and foremost,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help identify the stages of your argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow because several ideas are joined into long sentences, and links between claims are not always clear. The first body paragraph moves from affordability to job opportunities and then to parks without fully explaining the connections. Some references, such as “it” and “there,” are also unclear. Use shorter, more focused sentences, organise each paragraph around one main reason, and make the relationship between each example and its point explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “high-rise apartment buildings,” “overcrowded,” “affordable,” and “natural surroundings.” There are also attempts to express more specific concepts, such as “job opportunities” and “relaxing area.” However, the range is limited and some word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, including “provide a good home,” “make a space,” and “open spacious place.” Spelling errors such as “consit,” “apartmnet,” and “opportunites” are noticeable and reduce accuracy. Build a bank of precise housing and urban-planning expressions, and check spelling carefully. More natural phrasing would make your ideas easier to understand and give your argument greater precision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including conditional forms such as “If we build a house…” and a reason clause beginning “because.” However, complex sentences are often faulty or difficult to follow, and errors occur frequently in sentence boundaries, agreement, articles and verb forms. For example, “it can only consit of a family” and “it belong to everyone” show problems with agreement, while “a tall apartment blocks” has an article and plural mismatch. Several sentences run together without appropriate punctuation, making the argument harder to read. Practise building accurate sentences with one main idea, then add subordinate clauses only when you can control them. Check articles, singular/plural forms, verb agreement and punctuation during proofreading.

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