Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, number of people is higher than pervious year because the women has a lot of kids so governement should provide enough home in largest cities by build tall apartement in my view, it is a good choice because a tall apartement contains many home .

Firstly, it is a good way to build a tall apartement in largest cities because there is a higher space and provide a lote home for people and allow them to do many activities like metting people from other cities and participated in the develop this cities, build in the largest cities helps people to find a job in many companies and magazins and it created a new opportunities for young people and facilitating their life . Wheras this way has a negative influence like it has become the noise in cities and circulation however, it polluted the air, it created many seceral problem like chaos and cost of living in the cities .

So, in conclusion build home in the largest cities has advantages and disavantages influence in my view, i agree with this way because in the new world we are more independent then we must be lover and more cooperative also the gouvernement should be equality with people from different layers

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear overall view in the introduction and conclusion: you support tall apartment blocks because they can provide many homes. You also mention possible disadvantages, including noise, traffic and air pollution, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the discussion only partially answers “to what extent”: the position is not consistently explained, and the disadvantages are listed without showing how they affect your overall judgement. The points about jobs and meeting people are not clearly connected to housing provision. The response is 40 words below the required minimum, which limits the space available to develop reasons and provide a relevant example. Explain one or two benefits in detail and support them with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a main paragraph beginning “Firstly,” and a conclusion marked by “So, in conclusion.” This helps the reader identify the broad stages of your answer. However, there is little progression within the main paragraph, where benefits, disadvantages and unrelated points are joined together in long sentences. Connectors such as “Wheras” and “however” are used awkwardly, and the relationship between ideas is sometimes unclear. For example, the discussion moves from job opportunities to noise and then to cost of living without explaining the links. Use separate paragraphs for the advantages and disadvantages, and make each paragraph develop one central idea with clear transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “tall apartment,” “noise,” “air,” “cost of living” and “opportunities.” These choices allow the reader to identify the general subject of your argument. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make the writing less clear, such as “pervious,” “governement,” “magazins” and “seceral.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “higher space,” “many home” and “facilitating their life.” Aim to learn accurate topic vocabulary and common word partnerships, then check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise expressions would help you explain housing density, urban congestion and affordability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and linking words, as in “because a tall apartement contains many home” and “because there is a higher space and provide a lote home.” This shows an effort to write beyond isolated simple sentences. However, sentence structures are limited, and errors in agreement, articles, plurals and verb forms occur frequently. For example, “the women has” does not agree, “a lot of kids” is not supported by a clear grammatical subject, and “build tall apartement” needs an appropriate article or plural form. Several sentences run together, making the relationships between clauses difficult to follow. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build longer sentences with controlled clauses and consistent punctuation.

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