Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

As cities grow quickly,people need a place to live and tall appartment buildings seem like a fast solution,but the local plan decides whether that works well or not.People believes that the tall buildings are the best way to solve housing problem.I largely agree with this statement.The forthcoming parragraphs will discuss both perspectives .

On the one hand,supporters of this argument believe that multi-storey buildings are the best way to accommodate the residential because they can accommodate a large number of people at a limited area.This is benefical in big cities where land is expensive.Moreover building upward is more practical than spreading houses across.For example-Delhi and Mumbai are the cities which has a large number of high rise appartment block because of land issues.

On the other hand ,it has some disadvantages such as tall appartments is caused traffic jam this is because a large number of people lived at one place or a road .Moreover ,it makes the place overcrowding . A large number of people make the area packed and sometimes places like lift ,stairs and gardens get crowed and annoyed .

In conclusion,I largely agree with this statement,but it has some disadvantages also because every coin has two phase.One of the main benifit of high rise appartment it saves land because it gives an opportunity to people to live a larger community at a limited area where as sometimes it creates problem for people like trrafic jam , annoyed environment,and the main is noise polution because a large community creates many types of noises such as traffic noise, outdoor activites noise and so on.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you “largely agree,” and you give relevant reasons on both sides, including efficient land use and possible congestion and noise. The Delhi and Mumbai example also helps connect the argument to real cities. However, the response only partly develops the task: the benefits are explained more clearly than the drawbacks, which are mostly listed rather than supported with specific consequences or examples. The claim that tall buildings are the “best way” is not compared in depth with alternatives such as mid-rise housing or better use of existing urban land. To strengthen the response, explain why high-rise housing is preferable overall and develop each main reason with a clear example or explanation.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion. “On the one hand” and “On the other hand” signal the change in viewpoint, so the reader can follow the basic organisation. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the second body paragraph moves quickly from traffic to overcrowding and shared facilities without showing clearly how these points connect. Linking phrases such as “Moreover” are repeated, and some references, including “it” and “this,” do not identify their subject precisely. The conclusion repeats earlier points rather than drawing them together into a clear final judgement. Use topic sentences and more precise referencing, and connect each supporting detail explicitly to the paragraph’s main idea.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “multi-storey buildings,” “accommodate,” “land is expensive,” and “traffic jam,” which makes the subject understandable. There are also attempts to use less common expressions, such as “residential” and “overcrowding,” but several choices or forms are inaccurate or unnatural: “accommodate the residential,” “every coin has two phase,” and “annoyed environment.” Spelling errors such as “appartment,” “benefical,” “crowed,” and “polution” are noticeable and reduce the overall control of vocabulary. Aim for accurate collocations and check spelling carefully. A more precise range—for example, language about housing density, infrastructure pressure and noise pollution—would help express your ideas more clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “because” and a concluding sentence that gives several examples. However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence boundaries occur throughout. For example, “People believes” should use a plural verb, while “the cities which has” has a subject–verb agreement problem. In “tall appartments is caused traffic jam,” the sentence structure and verb form make the meaning difficult to follow. Commas are also often missing after introductory phrases, and some sentences run together. Practise building accurate sentences around one main clause, then add subordinate clauses only when you can control their grammar and punctuation.

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