Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is widely argued that the best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks,while some people believe that the tall blocks arent required.Iagree with the view to a large extent.This essay will explain the main reasons for my position.

The first reason why i hold this view is that the tall apartment locks means more rooms whichis effective for people with large families and small also. Although ,the cost of aparment can be differed but it is the most effective way to provied enough homes in a small piece of land also. For example, If i have a small piece of land i can make home but with the traditional idea of msking home it will be small with small rooms but if i add more blcks to it one by one there will be enough rooms which can be rented .Another iportant reason is that making tall apartment blocks can b

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

Your position is stated clearly: “I agree with the view to a large extent,” and you give relevant reasons, including making more homes on limited land and accommodating families. However, the response addresses the task only minimally because the second reason is cut off (“Another important reason is that making tall apartment blocks can b”), and the first example is not fully explained. The essay also does not consider any limitation or alternative to tall blocks, despite expressing partial rather than complete agreement. The response is 144 words, below the required 250 words, so it cannot develop the argument sufficiently. Extend each reason with a clear explanation and a specific example, and complete the essay with a conclusion that restates your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall sequence: an introduction states your view, followed by a paragraph beginning with the first reason and a transition to another reason. Phrases such as “The first reason” and “For example” help signal the direction of the argument. However, the response ends mid-sentence, so there is no completed development or conclusion, and the reader cannot follow the second point. Some connections are also awkward: “Although” introduces a contrast that is not clearly completed, while “Another important reason” is not followed by a full idea. Use separate, complete paragraphs for each main reason, make the relationship between sentences explicit, and add a concluding paragraph to create a clear progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “tall apartment blocks,” “large families,” “traditional idea,” and “small piece of land.” These choices make your general subject understandable. However, the range is basic and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, such as “locks” for “blocks,” “aparment,” “provied,” and “msking.” Some phrases are also imprecise, including “more rooms” and “add more blcks to it one by one”; more exact terms would help explain how high-rise housing increases capacity. Build a topic vocabulary around housing density, available land, construction costs, and residents’ needs, and check spelling and collocations carefully before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast with “Although” and a conditional example beginning “If I have a small piece of land.” The main position and some basic relationships between ideas can be understood. However, control is uneven: “the tall apartment blocks means” has subject–verb disagreement, and “which is effective for people with large families and small also” is not grammatically complete or clear. There are also errors in articles, sentence boundaries, and punctuation, as in “apartment blocks,while” and “Although ,the cost.” The conditional example shifts awkwardly between “I have,” “I can make,” and “it will be.” Practise complete, well-punctuated sentences and check agreement, articles, and consistent verb forms.

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