Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

The best way to provide enough homes in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks.

To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In the contemporary world, many individuals opine that the best way to provide sufficient accomaditions in large cities is to build tall apartment blocks. Moreover, I completely disagree with the statement and i will discuss further in this paragraph.

The first reason to disagree with the statement is that it is not safe for many individuals because nowadays, with the increasing rate of environmental problems such as earthquakes, floods and many more. it is unsafe for people who live in apartments especially on top floors they can easily get injured or may loose their life if the magnitude of earthquake is higher. Moreover, it is difficult for old people and pregant women to get out from their floors in medical emergencies if the lift is not working properly. Furthermore, it is also not safe for children and toddlers they may fell down from building and from stairs while playing.

In addition to, building tall apartment blocks to provide enough homes for individuals is not enteraintely bad because it will easy for those people who live in nuclear family. Moreover, while living in tall apartment blocks you can get many facilities such as swimming pool, access to gym and a big park with full of greenery so, people can get fresh air especially older citizen they can walk in morning and do some basic exercises.

In conclusion, I believe that it is not crucial to provide accomadition while building tall apartment blocks in urban cities because it may not safe during earthquakes and in other emergencies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You state a clear position—“I completely disagree”—and give relevant concerns about earthquakes, emergency access and children’s safety. However, the response only partially develops the task: the safety points are asserted rather than supported with examples or explanation, and the paragraph about facilities such as a pool and gym does not clearly explain how these benefits affect your disagreement with tall blocks as the best solution. Your conclusion repeats the position but does not weigh the alternatives or clarify what you consider a better way to provide homes. The response is 246 words, four words below the 250-word minimum; the nine words copied from the prompt are not counted. Develop your reasons with specific examples and address the “best way” comparison more directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the reader can generally follow the main points. However, progression within paragraphs is uneven: the first body paragraph moves from environmental hazards to lifts and then children without clearly linking these examples to a central explanation. The second paragraph begins “In addition to” but shifts to advantages of apartment blocks, making its relationship to your stated disagreement unclear. Connectors such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” are repeated and sometimes do not show the precise relationship between ideas. Use topic sentences that establish each paragraph’s purpose, then order supporting points logically and use referencing or transitions more selectively.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “environmental problems,” “magnitude,” “medical emergencies,” “nuclear family” and “facilities,” which helps communicate the subject. There is also some attempt at less common language, but inaccurate spelling and word choice reduce precision: “accomaditions” and “accomadition” are misspelled, while “enteraintely bad” appears to mean “entirely bad.” Other expressions, such as “get out from their floors” and “a big park with full of greenery,” are not natural collocations. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the overall message, but they make the writing less controlled. Check spelling carefully and learn common word partnerships for housing, safety and urban planning.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a conditional idea about lifts and a sentence beginning “because.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and punctuation sometimes makes the meaning harder to follow. For example, “with the increasing rate of environmental problems such as earthquakes…” is an incomplete construction, and “Moreover, I completely disagree with the statement and i will discuss further in this paragraph” needs more accurate sentence control and capitalization. Other issues include “it will easy” and “it may not safe,” where the verb “be” is missing, as well as “old people and pregant women” within a sentence that needs clearer grammatical framing. Practise complete clauses, accurate verb forms and punctuation, then proofread each sentence.

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